The day I learned, the day I died

[dibyendra]

Standing on the edge of cliff, staggering on uncertainties
Breathing frustrations, echoing obscenities
Always tangled onto the mess, and always cornered and stressed
Feels like this youth is laying on waste just to decay
Don't know what my future means to me, as mirage it seems,
And so are my elusive dreams, fighting the battle of life,
drifting in futility, wondering how far they can reach
I just wish if only the mirror could reflect my real picture,
Or should I peel the skin from the flesh,
And the flesh from the bone to see what remains there after all,
Or to see the soul clashing with the body for evasion,
Should the skull be smashed on the concrete wall?
Ain't there any easy way to exit from this hell of tensions?
Couldn't find any solutions for these messy confusions
To see my life in this poor situation was surely not my desire
Couldn't understand myself all this life, howsoever I tried
But, now it's too late to put out the flames of fire
Couldn't find the time for myself, but now I'm getting old and tired
Now, my penitence nor my penance won't gain salvation and remedy
A blade in the shivering hand slashed the veins distressingly
The oozing blood from the ruptured wrist is for real
The screaming pain and pulsating heartbeats are for real
Soon, the consciousness will end up in silence, and a peace will shine
A death is just an other facet of life, divided by a thin line

[qimissung]

Why dibyendra, this is gorgeous, very deep and rich. I knew you could write, but this is just amazing.

I especially like the lines beginning "Should I peel the skin from the flesh..." and the last two lines...beautiful.

[stephofthenight]

I must agree with Qimissung It was quite amazing, and as Q put it, very rich and deep.

[dibyendra]

Why dibyendra, this is gorgeous, very deep and rich. I knew you could write, but this is just amazing.

I especially like the lines beginning "Should I peel the skin from the flesh..." and the last two lines...beautiful.


I must agree with Qimissung It was quite amazing, and as Q put it, very rich and deep.

Thanks to both of you for the comments! And, thanks Qim for the PM as well. First, I was afraid to post this poem in LitNet as it was dark and melancholic, which was written during the time of total frustrations and it sounded like a suicide note too. Actually, this poem portrays my traumatic depressions, anger, and seclusion, and I must thank to the God that I survived through the pain and tensions.

[blazeofglory]

Dibeyndra,
I have come across your poem after a long time. It is wonderfully written of course. You are a real poet can come up with many enigmatic images out of the blues that add great value to your poems in point of fact.
It seems all you scribbled sprang up from the depth of your heart and they have substance and style and the fact you said that the poem mirrors your own expereince adds ice on the cake. Ideas, very deep and profound ideas welled up in your poem seems you have the sensibility a poet must have and rarely people can come up with the poignant and emotional lines.
I hope you will come up with bunches of poems in the days to come

[Pendragon]

God, Dibby, how much I can relate to this. Masterful wording!

[dibyendra]

Dibeyndra,
I have come across your poem after a long time. It is wonderfully written of course. You are a real poet can come up with many enigmatic images out of the blues that add great value to your poems in point of fact.
It seems all you scribbled sprang up from the depth of your heart and they have substance and style and the fact you said that the poem mirrors your own expereince adds ice on the cake. Ideas, very deep and profound ideas welled up in your poem seems you have the sensibility a poet must have and rarely people can come up with the poignant and emotional lines.
I hope you will come up with bunches of poems in the days to come

Thanks a lot, Blazeofglory, for appreciating this poem and for your beautiful comment! And, thanks for your PM! That was quite pleasant to read and that was quite inspiring as well.


God, Dibby, how much I can relate to this. Masterful wording!

Dale, many thanks for your comment! I recently came to know about your traumatic experience that you had faced in the near past. I am really sorry to hear that! May God give you strength and support when you need! My kind prayers goes to you and your family. Warm hugs from my side, and please take care!

The turmoil will recede soon,
and the flower will blossom,
once again unfolding its vivid colors,
with the presence of compassion in the rain,
that caress the withering petals with a care

~Jul 09, Dibyendra

[Virgil]

Diby, I'm going to have to dissent from the previous kudos of this poem. I don't care for it. Please understand I'm just offerring my honest thoughts here. It comes across as whining and mawkish and full of bathos. Every line is just an emotional outburst without giving us any situation of what the issue is or pulling us into the experience. It's just an outcry and I'm afraid to say trite. I'm not even sure anything there is all that original. I'm sorry. Take this for what it's worth, just my opinion.

[dibyendra]

Diby, I'm going to have to dissent from the previous kudos of this poem. I don't care for it. Please understand I'm just offerring my honest thoughts here. It comes across as whining and mawkish and full of bathos. Every line is just an emotional outburst without giving us any situation of what the issue is or pulling us into the experience. It's just an outcry and I'm afraid to say trite. I'm not even sure anything there is all that original. I'm sorry. Take this for what it's worth, just my opinion.

Virgil, thanks for your honest opinion and disagreement about the earlier opinions. I understand that everyone has their own perspectives and everyone draws the meaning differently. I am sorry that you didn't like it and you didn't find it original.