You from Me

[Cellar Door]

sorry, haven't been around for a while...


You from Me

separation
separate
two beings that used to be one
alone
even in your embrace
dark in the light of your smile
you approach
i wither
i wilt
i slink away
my touch leaves you hollow
i see it in your face
the lines that weren't there before
choke me
tangle me in dissonant webs
maybe you just don't do it for me
anymore
separate
separation

[Buh4Bee]

Ouch! That is a challenging subject matter. I really enjoyed the way you began and ended the poem.

[Dark Muse]

OOooh I really liked this, such wonderful imagery and it captures such a feeling of aloneess

[Cellar Door]

glad you liked it guys!

[blazeofglory]

sorry, haven't been around for a while...


You from Me

separation
separate
two beings that used to be one
alone
even in your embrace
dark in the light of your smile
you approach
i wither
i wilt
i slink away
my touch leaves you hollow
i see it in your face
the lines that weren't there before
choke me
tangle me in dissonant webs
maybe you just don't do it for me
anymore
separate
separation

This piece is incredibly beautiful and it has expressed something that is truer than life and clearer than day.

This is something that reveals us to the reality we are covering up

Sooner or later we must know it. The doze is unpalatable.

[Cellar Door]

thanks blaze, you sure know how to compliment a girl!
:blush: