Water lilies

[peter7805]

My water lilies
you are so beautiful that i see
so fragrant and so sweet
there is no other thing that can compete
you are the very spirit i will forever keep

My water lilies
you are all my old memories
and my futurre dreams
so fragrant and so sweet
i love you gentle and your tenderness
so many pink flowers and green leaves
and the clear blue water underneath
the wind and the cloud are all asleep
and only my love my water lilies

[DanielBenoit]

A very nice simple and sweet ode to something close to your heart. Most writers seem to over-do odes to something they love with superflourus words and sweeping stanzas, yours is just very simple to the point that we understand how you feel. I also like how the only thing capitalized in the poem is "My water lilies."

[blazeofglory]

My water lilies
you are so beautiful that i see
so fragrant and so sweet
there is no other thing that can compete
you are the very spirit i will forever keep

My water lilies
you are all my old memories
and my futurre dreams
so fragrant and so sweet
i love you gentle and your tenderness
so many pink flowers and green leaves
and the clear blue water underneath
the wind and the cloud are all asleep
and only my love my water lilies

I like the poem