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libernaut
08-17-2009, 01:06 AM
planning on writing a 25 page story

dystopia, hypnopaedic brainwashing and micro ray dna cellular electroshock nullification of the masses by means of thought control. language as a form of thought control, using terms like "that is bad" as to say "good" along orwellian newspeak ideas of "blackwhite" as a word that meaning nothing causes thought patterns to recognize that and adapt to a superficial level of thinking incapable of deep thought on anything at all. Technopoly and technodratic influence on social constructs and the downfalls despite its convenience. moral nihilism and corruption.

thinking of that as the setting, and then for the plot take the miniature play within the play of Hamlet prince of Denmark with the title "The Mousetrap" in which the plot follows hamlet itself but the main character is named Lucianus who poisons the king.

LMK
08-17-2009, 08:08 PM
It seems rather bleak, and that may be the intention...I say go with it and see where it takes you.

billl
08-17-2009, 10:57 PM
yeah, if you can make it good, and ALSO show a way out, then you'll have done something more difficult than a lot of people bother to try. but like LMK said, maybe you're just trying to craft some kind of "warning" or just want to be bleak for some reason.

libernaut
08-23-2009, 10:09 PM
thanks for the suggestions, i just started writing it and only have a page or so right now, but im basically planning to write it on my lunch breaks