My monologue

[netsuke]

Hi, everybody!
I never wrote before, but the strange thing happened and our English teacher tolled us to write a monologue. And it is not any monologue, I have to write a monologue for one of Shakespeare's characters.
I just started, but I really want to know if I on the right track...
can you please read and tell me what do you think about it
P.S. it is not completely finished
P.P.S. English is my second language, forgive me for my mistakes.


Monologue of Benedick (Much Ado About Nothing) Just before his marriage with Beatrice...


Today, the day I’m getting married
Today, the day I’m starting the new life,
This day, today I want to say some thing about my old life,
My mistakes that I’ve made and
Apologise for every ungrateful thing I’ve done before
The very first thing I wish to tell you
Is that: the man was born to make mistakes
No man is innocent
And it is not my fault
My job is to kill another man,
And just for this
I’m not going to be forgiven by the Lord
But today
I want to say sorry for my words
That I’ve said to Claudio about Hero
I want to apologise for my stupid views
I had before about women
I thought there wasn’t anybody right for me
As well as for my friend
But he is old enough to make his own decisions
I didn’t have anything against lovely Hero
I just didn’t want Claudio to get married
Because it would have ruined my beliefs
And probably because of him
I’m standing here today
Forgive me Claudio
And thank you
You will be my friend for many years further

And now you, my love
I knew you before, but then
I wasn’t ready to accept you
Today things changed
I wish to take your hand
And ask for my forgiveness
My behaviour hurt you
I fully understand you and
Agree when you named me a dull fool
Your anger now is clear to me
Your thoughts, your words
It all was only echo of your love
And while I was deaf
I couldn’t hear it
For last few days
The world has changed for me
Today, the love is only one real filling
That I know for sure, is true
And if you can,
Forgive me
For my false standards and
Foolish thinking that I had
For you I’ve changed
I went against my friend and Don Pedro
Who is also my friend
But in much higher status
For one kind word of yours
I was ready to kill my own friend

to be continued...

[kelby_lake]

Not funny enough, I'd say.

[DickZ]

Not funny enough, I'd say.
I'm not as sure as kelby that a monologue has to be funny. Do many people roll on the floor in laughter while reading Hamlet's soliloquy?

I think that for someone who speaks English as a second language, you have done an admirable job. You seem to have a greater respect for our language and its rules than many of our native English speakers, and you have done a reasonable job of capturing the sentiments of the characters.
Keep up the good work. With continued practice, you will find it gets easier to express your ideas with the written word.