Addiction

[Free Falcon]

Something in your smile
does not relate
to our muddy planet
it is full of briliant rays
that never bother my eyes
have you heared about
a ray-addiction?
it is typically mine
i addict
the rays of love and pasion
in your wonderful eyes

[paperleaves]

WOW. Beautiful :) I especially like "Something in your smile
does not relate
to our muddy planet"
it gives it ethereal qualities. Thank you for sharing such a beautiful work, it is wonderful to watch your works expand and whirl into beautiful possibilities!

[Buh4Bee]

What a lovely poem. Thank you for sharing that Free Falcon. It is beautiful.

:thumbs_up

[Free Falcon]

WOW. Beautiful :) I especially like "Something in your smile
does not relate
to our muddy planet"
it gives it ethereal qualities. Thank you for sharing such a beautiful work, it is wonderful to watch your works expand and whirl into beautiful possibilities!

I am proud of your opinion Papeleaves
Thanks alot

[PrinceMyshkin]

Something about



i addict


doesn't quite make sense to me grammatically. Otherwise I praise you for the directness and simplicity of this poem.

[Lynne50]

Something about



doesn't quite make sense to me grammatically. Otherwise I praise you for the directness and simplicity of this poem.


I liked your poem, too FreeFalcon You used very heartfelt words.

[PrinceMyskin, I haven't heard the word addict (stress on 2nd syllable)used as a verb very often either, but according to Webster's Dictionary, it has the 1st definition as (vt)...to devote or surrender oneself to something habitually or obsessively. That would make it a verb, right?

[PrinceMyshkin]

[PrinceMyskin, I haven't heard the word addict (stress on 2nd syllable)used as a verb very often either, but according to Webster's Dictionary, it has the 1st definition as (vt)...to devote or surrender oneself to something habitually or obsessively. That would make it a verb, right?

I'd never encountered it that way. Thanks for checking it out. I still feel it's a mistake to use it in such an unfamiliar way, but perhaps Fee Falcon will feel otherwise.

[Free Falcon]

Thanks for both of you
I encountered it as Lynne50 did explain
i don`t think that it was a mistake
anyhow
i liked your discusion and opinion toward the poetry
Best of thanks

[Indy]

Hmm i don't know if this a grave sin on this forum -if it is forgive me- but something in the phrasing in that poem didn't quite chime with me , it may be a mistake on reading it on my part but it seems to flow more logical when it is this way.

Addiction

Something in your smile,
does not relate,
to our muddy planet.
It is full of briliant rays,
that have never bother my eyes.

Have you heared about,
a ray-addiction?
It is typically mine.
I addict,
The rays of love and passion,
In your wonderful eyes.

Anyway a truly brilliant poem free falcon and let me say again i am truly sorry if this is against some unspoken rule of this forum.