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PrinceMyshkin
07-09-2009, 10:58 AM
...who will know that this was meant for her





If soul could lust
my own would be on fire for you!

But, poor thing, it’s capable of just
the purest thoughts, though who
ever proclaimed carnality
to be impure?

I long for the fineness of you,
the well-informed innocence
distilled from the love of being.

If I were to send you a love song
it would be, simply, succinctly:

You are!
breathtest
07-09-2009, 11:09 AM
PrinceMyshkin you have outdone yourself once again. I could not imagine having to pick my favourite of all your poems, but if i absolutely had to, gun to my head, it would be this one. The beauty of it is astounding. Your desire here is expressed better than i could ever express mine.

I only wish that i had written it, haha. But, seriously, this is wonderful and i am hugely greatful that you have decided to share it with us.
paperleaves
07-09-2009, 11:12 AM
This is beautiful ^_^ You are! You are!

Love, Kate
PrinceMyshkin
07-09-2009, 11:15 AM
Breathtest, Kate: your reactions have given me as much pleasure as did writing that poem.
motherhubbard
07-09-2009, 01:59 PM
Overall I liked this, Prince. I think the 7, 8, 9. and 10th lines took away from it. But, what do I know?
PrinceMyshkin
07-09-2009, 02:03 PM
Overall I liked this, Prince. I think the 7, 8, 9. and 10th lines took away from it. But, what do I know?

As for what you do or don't know, please check out the revised version of this poem.
MANICHAEAN
07-09-2009, 02:07 PM
Dear Prince
Sublime. The nexus of balance and sensitivity.
motherhubbard
07-09-2009, 04:44 PM
As for what you do or don't know, please check out the revised version of this poem.

Well- I think it's perfect. I just hate that you changed it because of what I said. I wonder if you like it better now?
PrinceMyshkin
07-09-2009, 05:15 PM
Well- I think it's perfect. I just hate that you changed it because of what I said. I wonder if you like it better now?

I changed it because once you pointed that out I saw that the lines in question did not fit. Thank you for pointing them out.
Virgil
07-09-2009, 07:46 PM
I didn't see the original version, but this is quite lovely. Very nice Prince. :)
PrinceMyshkin
07-10-2009, 09:30 AM
Dear Prince
Sublime. The nexus of balance and sensitivity.

Thank you. Much appreciated.
Buh4Bee
07-12-2009, 04:10 PM
Wow! This poem reminds me of the joy a person can experience just from loving another person, even if it is not reciprocated.

Very nice! It is nice to see emotions expresses so openly and honestly.
Beautifull
07-12-2009, 06:13 PM
you have beautifull writing...:redface:
Helga
07-12-2009, 06:38 PM
beautiful as always
PrinceMyshkin
07-13-2009, 11:16 AM
Wow! This poem reminds me of the joy a person can experience just from loving another person, even if it is not reciprocated.


Very nice! This reminds me of my perception that the universe is in at least one sense a benevolent place, in that no law, natural or man-made, can limit us from how much we love.
Buh4Bee
07-13-2009, 07:23 PM
No doubt! No doubt! It's a beautiful and difficult thing. Sometimes very painful, but no less beautiful.