A mountain

[Free Falcon]

Whenever i step forward
toward your paradise
A mountain faces me
I stop
and take a breath
so deeply
and wait
because i can`t move back
as i can`t go forward
The fragrance of your Paradise
keep me anestheside on place
I try to think
about the sense of this mountain
which impairs me
and in a moment of honesty
i discovered that,
it is constructed
of the blocks of my gulties

[Dark Muse]

I really liked this one, I liked the concept behind it, and it had some nice imagery.

[paperleaves]

Beautiful imagery, I read this before going on a hike today and it stuck with me the entire time. Great new perspectives you bring to the LitNet table. :) Keep posting!!!

[Free Falcon]

I really liked this one, I liked the concept behind it, and it had some nice imagery.
It is my pleasure to read your comment
Thank you

[Free Falcon]

Beautiful imagery, I read this before going on a hike today and it stuck with me the entire time. Great new perspectives you bring to the LitNet table. :) Keep posting!!!
Thank you paperleaves
I appreciate your reading and your comments
All the best

[Buh4Bee]

Keep writing Free Falcon! The poetry let's me indulge in the subject matter. It also makes me think about the power that writing has to express and release such amazing and vibrant ideas.

Do you mean "guilt" in the last line of the poem?

[Free Falcon]

Keep writing Free Falcon! The poetry let's me indulge in the subject matter. It also makes me think about the power that writing has to express and release such amazing and vibrant ideas.

Do you mean "guilt" in the last line of the poem?
Thanks Jersea
yes..this what i meant
All the best