The Meeting - Please comment on my first ever story

[pedro3005]

I'm sort of new to actually writing, but this idea has been on my mind for some time, i just needed to get it on paper, or on this case, a digital file. Please be honest with me, as I'm sure some (or several) things could be improved.
For formatting reasons, I uploaded it on google docs. Link:
http://docs.google.com/View?id=dgrwkbdv_11fxd6w2g4

Thank you for taking the time to read it :) !

Edit: As of 2:09am, Friday, July, 2009 (GMT time), the story has been edited for proper grammar and structuring of sentences, but nothing that will impact the story greatly.

[Delta40]

I was a little befuddled due to the odd use of punctuation. This made it difficult for me to get into the flow of the tale. It was halting in its use of wording.

Are you saying here that Mr Keating moved an entire meeting to another day with a single blank piece of paper through his illustrious talk?

[pedro3005]

I know, I had that feeling it just didn't flow. I'm thinking of abandoning this idea and moving for another story, but what I was trying to show is how doing a lot they actually do nothing, with some humor, that unfortunately went undetected, like when the crowd roared from Mr. Keating's comment, because since he said practically nothing, how could it cause an outrage? And also the guy who makes no real contribute to the story, but makes an appearance anyways. That was my Monty Python moment. Did you also get that Mr. Keating was old because I was trying to show that their methods are old, antiquated and don't work well.
Oh and now I remember, that the lack of flowing in the story could perhaps represent what it was like to be in that meeting. I made the story really short so a reader could make through it without loosing his patience, and the humor was also injected because of that (counter-balance the boredom of the speeches).