First time writing poetry in Stanza style. [feedback appreciated]

[BuckyKev]

My knowledge on literature is below par I am afraid, but I believe this style is called a stanza, opposed to my usual style which is called a couplet. - Though to be totally honest I am not sure. I hope I have done it correctly, any feedback would be appreciated. (Though not necessary if you do not wish, obviously)

I have forgotten what it is to sleep
I remember less of living.
My eyes are dry and no longer weep
My heart is unforgiving.

I have forgotten what it is to care
I remember less of hate.
My world is barren and bare
My life gave in to fate.

I have forgotten what it is to love
I remember less of dying.
My soul will not fly up and above
My body is still trying.

I have forgotten what it is to feel
But I remember I once felt.
I used to know what was real
Before you I had knelt.

I have not forgotten the ring I offered
Nor your face as it twinkled.
Never should I have even bothered
Your face disgusted 'n' wrinkled.

If ever I have the wealth - to match your liking
I will come to you once more.
Then I would sell you to a scabby viking
The price will be a score.

[Pryderi Agni]

Ha ha, nice revengeful poetry...

I take issue with the lingo, though.


Dieing

Do we really write it like that?


disgusted 'n' wrinkled

OK, here's a strict rule in poetry: NO SLANG ABBREVIATION. The reader's gonna read that as 'and' anyway, so why stint on the 'a's and 'd's, huh?

[BuckyKev]

Thanks for the spelling mistake on dying... I was thinking for some reason dying is like when you dye hair... Don't know, dumb mistake. Still, thanks for pointing it out.

As for the " disgusted n wrinkled " ... where I come from in England it is seen quite often. Shop titles for example; "Stop 'n' Shop" ... I was going to change that entire section because I wasn't entirely happy with it either. But not for the same reason as you. - Still, your reply is appreciated and I will give more thought to the reader when writing in future.

I disagree with you on the poetry rule though. There are plenty of slang abbreviations in poetry all over the world. I very rarely use them so this is no problem to me, but I still disagree all the same.

Thank you. :)

[PrinceMyshkin]

I liked it well enough through the first four stanzas but felt that the turn to the hitherto unmentioned vindictive anger was abrupt and because of that, perhaps, the rhyming came to feel forced.