A smoky image

[Free Falcon]

In the space of the horizon
threads of smoke
are gradually forming
an image of a woman
from the far past
with a smoky smile
and fire eyes
The lips
are an extract of the hell
with heavenly colors
and taste
a smoky image of a woman
which is formed
by an exhalation of sadness
during a smoking
of memorial cigarette
has gone
with the next smoky breath
and vanished
in the space of forgetting

[Justin Rockwell]

Pretty nice and original. I had an idea similar to this for a song I was writing a few weeks ago, but I scrapped it.

please return the feedback....

http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?t=45182

[Free Falcon]

Pretty nice and original. I had an idea similar to this for a song I was writing a few weeks ago, but I scrapped it.

please return the feedback....

http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?t=45182

Thank you justin

[amuse]

just curious, is "smoly" a combo of smoky and holy? if so, it's brilliant. :) (but if not, please don't change it; it's very inspired and fits in so well with the "heavenly colors.")

[Free Falcon]

just curious, is "smoly" a combo of smoky and holy? if so, it's brilliant. :) (but if not, please don't change it; it's very inspired and fits in so well with the "heavenly colors.")
Thank you my friend
Your comment made me so happy
It was a great risk for me to write poetry in english, thourh i write well in my mother tongue language..but your comment encouraged me to continue
Thank you once again
All the best

[Buh4Bee]

I liked the idea of a memory appearing in something you see, like a cloud or in your case smoke. The smoke reminds me how real time fades into memories and we can remember in moments of sadness and either feel sadder or possibly happy. Nice!

[Free Falcon]

I liked the idea of a memory appearing in something you see, like a cloud or in your case smoke. The smoke reminds me how real time fades into memories and we can remember in moments of sadness and either feel sadder or possibly happy. Nice!

I am so happy that you liked it
Thank you for being here
All the best

[amuse]

:) All the Best to you, as well.

[paperleaves]

The imagery is gripping of the heart ...keep posting! :)

[Free Falcon]

The imagery is gripping of the heart ...keep posting! :)
Thank you dear friend
I am a proud of being here among you
Your kind words are a part of inspiration
Thanks to all ..and Thank you once again paperleaves

[stephofthenight]

You put forth breathtaking imagery :D A very enjoyable piece. Thank you so much for sharing.

[Free Falcon]

You put forth breathtaking imagery :D A very enjoyable piece. Thank you so much for sharing.
Wow
Thank you stephofthenight
Was a great pleasure to read your comment
Thank you