poem

[belinndda]

hey guys! i wrote this poem about long distance a couple weeks back and really need some feedback on it. any comments would be much appreciated. cheers! :)

Superficial Estrangement

For I would rather pine for a distant love than force content with a mediocre lover.

Richness of this entailment,
erasure of anguish and discontent.
Echoes in my visions,
recalibrated by the core.

Subject myself to shrieking winds,
shiver at the perilous edge.
Challenge the plunge of mortal trepidation,
gratification in hell’s cushions.

If I couldn’t see,
I will carry the heart of a lion.
But love is blind,
my work is done.

[breathtest]

This is a heartfelt poem. I particularly like the first line.