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sc9108
06-11-2009, 09:52 AM
This is wrote as a script because I'm going to be filming it soon.
I need to do a final edit, But I think you'll be able to make it out,
I hope you like it and I'll explain it a bit more when I get some feedback I just want to know if you get why and how it ends,



IN LIMBO not knowing the result or next stage of something and powerless to influence it,

SPRITE

Queuing at cafe, (Day Time)
Standing waiting behind two ''normal'' looking girls,

Lady ''What can i get ya?''

Bridget ''Hi can i have a bottle of erm,, pepsi please''

Lady nods

Mona ''What lemonades do you have?''

Lady ''Err we have 7up dear''

Mona''do you have sprite ?''

Lady ''No we don't but 7up is the same as sprite''(Passes Bridget her drink)

Mona ''what no they aren't''

(Bridget holding her drink and watching back and forth as she puts her money down)

Lady ''They are its just comes in a different bottles thats all''

Mona ''What how can you say that, they have a totally different texture and taste plus 7up has way more additives and preservatives,''

Lady ''look fine, I'll take your word for it but we don't have sprite do you want 7up or not ?''

Mona ''OK whatever fine,,''

Lady hands her a bottle,

Mona ''Actually can I take two bottles please,''

Bridget standing drinking away from counter Mona in background paying for drinks,
Mona walks over,

Bridget ''you don't even like sprite you always drink 7up,''

Mona ''yeah but thats not the point, I mean what if one day I decide to broaden my horizons and feel the need buy a bottle, I wont be able to buy it from there will I''

Bridget '' Well I spos,,, oh hey erm how'd the interview with the job center go? ''

Mona ''yeah constructive, I mean looks like I'm definitely getting a job soon''

FLASHBACK,

Lady ''So,,(looks at paper) Mona-Lisa Brown,''

Mona ''I know the final verse really lets the whole thing down,''

Lady ''Yes,, err so Mona, what qualifications and skills do you have''Smiling

Mona looks blankly,




Bridget ''Cool, well good I mean as long as it don't affect your course work,''

Mona nods,

Bridget ''hey did I tell you about the project thing I'm entering in class ?''

Mona ''err you told me about a bit yeah,''

Bridget ''yeah well its this competition for all art students in england, They're making us enter one piece and they get reviewed by some art critique people,''

Mona ''Cool what do you win?,''

Bridget ''I dunno, spos its something just to win out of all those people, Oh ! Matt''(interrupted)

Mona ''Who's Matt''

Bridget ''You know hat Matt?''

Mona ''Oh who works at homebase''

Bridget ''Yeah him well his in our class he came like third last year''

Mona ''What so you send your art off ?''

Bridget ''Yeah we're finishing them now and then we send them to the people, then they send
a letter back if we win or whatever''

Mona ''So what happens to your art do they send it back''

Bridget ''I don't think so, well Matt didn't get his back,''

Mona ''So what you win nothing and you don't even get your art back ?''

Bridget ''Er yeah pretty much yeah,'' ''Hey we should be getting back soon''

Mona ''I'm not going back today''

Bridget ''What why?''

Mona ''Its practicing portrait shots again you know I hate them,''

Bridget ''Right well,, it's up to you, erm guess I'll see you later then, What you going back home or what?''

Mona ''Yeah probably I dunno might go into town or something,''

Bridget ''OK cool well look, I'll call you when I'm out and we'll meet up,''

Mona ''Okay,''

Bridget walks off,
ART CLASS

Teacher smiley and enthusiastic ''OK gang now as you already know, We only have till the end of tomorrow to finish all pieces for the competition, So I'd like very much if you all try your best haha and get as much done today so you don't have to be in a mad rush tomorrow,'' Laughs madly continues talking,

Bridget at table with Matt , Hannah,

Bridget ''Jesus I wish she'd shut the hell up''

Hannah ''You coming to the cinema with us tonight?'' With fake smile

Bridget ''What you going to see?''

Hannah ''Oh that new Ben Stiller movie, his so funny'' laughing

Bridget ''erm, yeah sure,, ok''

Teacher ''And thats about it really so if you'd all like to start'' Smiling

Mona in room bored,

BENCH

Mona Sitting alone on bench with camera and paper looking at job ads,
(Shes plays with camera and takes pictures of paper advert randomly looking away as she takes it)Picture advertising theme park assistant comes on on screen,

Mona looks at picture, ''hm could be interesting''
Calls up ads,
''Hi I'm calling about the job vacancy you have advertised in the paper I was wondering if
its still available'' ''OK its not, no thats fine thank you''
Hangs up,

Old man walks over and sits down on bench,
Mona circles advert in paper and looks over then back to paper,

Leo ''You know I used to do that years ago, long long time ago now mind,''

Mona looks up,''Do what?''

Leo ''Photography, used to be quite good at it to,'' ''Names Leo,'' Puts hand out,

Mona ''Mona'' shakes hand, ''What did you do it professionally or just,,''

Leo ''Oh no professionally ,, well eventually, I started out at a local newspaper and then worked my way up,''

Mona ''how'd you mean?''

Leo ''Well that wasn't what I,, err aspired to do, Bored the heck out of me, That was just a,,, stepping stone as they say, But once I worked my way up there, I quit, packed a bag left it all, moved out to New York then ,,I done what I wanted to do''

Mona ''I'd love to do something like that,,, just move away you know, So what was it you wanted to do?''

Leo ''Well I was a photographer, I wanted take photos how I wanted them to be done not how some arsehole told me to, I started of just selling photos to art galleries , then I got a good reputation and celebrities as you call em wanted me to do photography for them,''

Mona ''What celebrities did you photograph,''

Leo ''Well quite a few, Some were very arrogant and a pain to work with, But a few were very nice but my favorite and to this day I'm still a big fan, John Lennon,''

Mona ''Wow! I'm a big fan too, did you speak to him?''

Leo ''Oh yes I spoke to him a few times, The first time I met him we was shotting for an album cover and I've even got a signed photo to prove it''

Mona ''wow I'd love to see that''

Leo ''Well my home isn't to far, Would you keep an old man company for awhile?'' smile

Mona ''Sure,, why not''

Gets up throws paper in bin (See Cleaner Wanted with circle around it),

JOHN LENNON

Leo walking through door ''Sorry about the mess, When you live alone and don't get many guests ,It always slips your mind'' Light laughing

Leo ''oh I tell you what, You wait here I'll fetch us some drinks and some cake,'' Smiling happily,

Mona ''Yeah ,, thanks that'd be lovely''

Leo walks to kitchen, Mona walks around

Mona ''Sooo,, Leo you got many Lennon albums ?,''

Leo ''Oh yes every album his made,, beatles too,I think I've even got one in the record player now haha, Switch it on!''

Mona switches player on music plays, She looks to the side of it and sees a photo of him and his wife,

Mona ''Is this your wife in the picture?''

Leo ''Yes , yes thats Debra, She recently passed away, I met her while in New York one of the reasons I came back,, just to get away you know,''

Mona ''Sorry I didn't mean to,,'' Interrupted

Leo ''No no no you don't have to apologize ''

PAUSE

Mona ''So do you still enjoy taking pictures ?''

Leo ''Err yeah ,, every now and then, Its not something you can give up, I suppose after doing it for so many years,,, its just natural,, I mainly like to take pictures of animals now though, Such honesty with them they never lie to the camera you know,''

Mona ''Yeah definitely, They make us practice portrait pictures at college, the pictures always
turn out false and fake,''

KETTLE BOILED

Leo ''Do you have sugar and milk?''

Mona ''yeah two sugars please,''

Leo walks out with cake and tea,

Leo passes tea and cake

Mona ''Thank you''

Mona takes a bite of cake ''Wow Leo did you make this ?''

Leo ''Yes it was Debra's recipe for lemon drizzle cake, she used to make one every Monday so
I always do the same,''

Mona ''Wow its really really good''
Leo ''I'm glad you like it,''

Leo ''So do you study photography full time then ?''

Mona ''erm yeah kind of,''

Leo ''Do you enjoy it?''

Mona ''Part of it,,well yeah ,,most of it just some things I don't like,,, but you get that with anything so,''

Leo ''I could never stick at a course myself,''

Mona ''Well,, you done ok without''

Leo ''Well I suppose if you look at it that way depends if your a positive or negative person,''

Mona ''What do you mean,I mean you got to photograph famous people sell your photographs to art galleries,, I mean it don't get better than that''

Leo ''Yes if thats how you want to look at it,, but I missed a lot of things,, I didn't get to see my family and friends as much being so far away, To start of with being so young and far away from everyone I cared about it was very lonely,''

Mona ''Would you have liked it to turn out differently ?''

Leo ''No,, I mean I wouldn't have met her'' points to pictures and looks at it with a smile,

Leo ''Oh yes,, the picture !,'' gets up and goes to cupboard,

Leo finds it and shows it to Mona

Mona ''oh my god,,, wow this is so cool Leo my friend isn't gonna believe me when I tell her,''

Leo ''Well take it to her, show her it''

Mona ''You serious I mean I'd bring it back''

Leo ''Of cause''

Mona ''Thanks ,, and thanks for the'' interrupted

Leo ''Anytime''





Mona's room, She looks at phone its switched off,
She tries to turn it on but no battery
Mona ''****''
She gets a charger for it and plugs it in,
She sees a message she plays it,

She puts it on loud speaker,
As it plays she takes the picture out of her bag and puts it on bedside table,
Bridget ''Hey, I've called you like a hundred times, look I'm sorry some people from my class are going to the cinema and they asked me if I wanted to go,Can we go out tomorrow night instead?, Look well I'm going in the cinema now so,,, I dunno call me tomorrow or something okay,?''


Mona knocks on Bridget's door, She opens it,

Mona ''Hey cool I got you before you left, You'll never believe what I've got,'' Goes to bag,Interrupted

Bridget ''When were you gonna tell me?''

Mona stops and looks up lightly laughing ''What,, tell you what?''

Bridget ''That you got kicked out of college for not going?''

Mona ''What ..how'd you hear that''

Bridget ''Matt's bro,,,Look it doesn't matter why didn't you tell me?''

Mona '' ,, its no big deal I mean,, plenty of people make it without going there to study its all just fake ,,, no one learns real stuff there anyway''

Bridget ''Mona it is a big deal I mean,, god first you quit your GCSE's then you were lucky enough and I mean really lucky to get a place there, then you **** it up,,, **** Mona your so stupid I mean you could really be good at photography''

Mona ''Well at least I'm just being myself I mean ,,ever since you toke that course,, your just fake ,''

Bridget ''Look I really don't care anymore, if you want be a **** up all your life fine, but don't think I'm gonna be one too,'' Walks off

Mona stands there

Mona ''**** !''




Knocks on Leo's door Leo answers it his been drinking and theres a bottle on the table,

Mona ''I need someone to talk to''

Leo ''Mona ,, come in come in whats,, whats wrong''

Mona walks in

Mona ''I'm useless Leo, I'm a complete **** up,''

Leo ''What ,, no no ,, Mona your , your not,, your a bright girl,,,''

Mona ''oh yeah so if I'm bright how come I got kicked out of college,, I mean ,,, I have no chance I couldn't even stick at my GCSE's,, I can't even get a job ,,,,''

Starts to cry

Leo Moves in wipes her eyes ''Hey don't cry''

Mona ''I'm sick of feeling like this Leo''

Leo ''Its ok ,, its ok'' he stares at her then leans in to kiss her,

Mona pushes him away and he falls to the floor,

Mona ''What are you doing ,,''

Leo ''Mona I'm sorry I ,,''

Mona ''I trusted you ,,''

Mona walks to the door,

Leo ''please wait forgive me Mona''

she leaves and he cries on the floor,




Teacher almost tearful ''OK guys I'm really pleased you've all finished and I'm so proud you've all done such a grand job, if you'd like to bring your pieces to my desk I'll get them tagged and ready to be sent of,''

Bridget puts hand up

Teacher smiley ''yes Bridget''

Bridget ''I don't want to send mine,''

Teacher shocked ''Bridget I don't think you understand, this competition could do so much for your reputation if you win, if your serious with your art, I really do think you really should send it,''

Bridget ''I don't care,, I want to keep it,''

Teacher ''Well Bridget if thats the level of commitment your putting into this course I'm afraid you'll be graded accordingly''

Bridget gets up and leaves

Teacher ''Bridget ,,, Bridget''

Mona in her room packing bag, she sees Lennon picture and then throws it on floor,

Bridget walking towards Mona's house holding wrapped present,
Sees Mona in taxi stands looking,
Mona in taxi looks out and sees Bridget puts hand to window in a wave Bridget returns it,
Taxi drives off, Mona opens envelope in hand see ticket to New York,
Bridget stands there looks a present in hand then drops it and walks off,
two months later,

Leo walks to mail box drunk, takes out post and walks back, a postcard drops to the floor,
End

sc9108
06-11-2009, 12:59 PM
Is it best to just write a short summary of the story :[ ?