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jikan myshkin
06-09-2009, 04:54 AM
Deathbed confessions of a sinner


Gypsy lady smile at me
The night is growing cold
Fairest angel sing for me
My ears are growing faint
Helen of troy smile for me
I am stranded on an island
The virgin Madonna weep for me
For I am hung out to dry
Oh artist with thy brush
Paint the sky golden for me
For my eyes are growing dim
Goddess of antiquity play thy lyre for me
I am moaning out of tune
Florence nightingale watch over me
For I am a child
And all ye ladies with
Thy eyes so fair
Guide me through to the other side

Helga
06-09-2009, 04:28 PM
I like this a lot, the rhythm and how it flows perfectly... love it...

qimissung
06-10-2009, 01:32 PM
It's npt just fish eggs, jikan, it's caviar! well-conceived and beautifully done. I like it a lot.

Pendragon
06-11-2009, 08:01 AM
I second the motion for great flow! Wow!

Virgil
06-11-2009, 08:16 PM
It's actually quite nice Jikin. I like it too. Good work.

I think you have a typo in this line: "Goddess of antiquity play they lyre for me."