LeonClaire
06-08-2009, 02:26 PM
Hi everyone I been planning this story for ages I just what to get people's opinion it's a vampire love story.
Andrea - Female Vampire
Zack - Hero
Barracas - Cult leader
Serogos - "Demon" Soul extractor
The story is about a girl named Andrea, who is a vampire one sunny day when she is outisde in the shade, she's taking in the lovely summer breeze and starts to feel some compassion for being alive, but when a woman and her kid pass her by, she starts to hear dark horrible voices, telling her to kill them, she rushes back into her little cottage house and cries. Before Andrea was turned she was a nice quiet country girl, but a vampire cult chose her to become a wife of one of there vampires, but she ran away after she had changed.
Andrea decides that's she has had enough she goes on top of a city building and awaits the sun to take her life but a boy who sees her from below confronts her, at first she tells him to go away but he doesn't listen the boy learns that she's a vampire, she falls into his arms with tears drizzling down her face, the boy tells her that he will help her, the boy restrains Andrea from eating, Andrea starts to cough up blood the crave just gets worse and worse but the boy stays with her all the way, the boy as more than Andrea to worry about, when the Vampire cult turn up looking for her, the boy must protect Andrea from them.
In this story Andrea learns that the boy is dying she can't believe it, the boy tells her how a death god appraoched him with 3 wishes in exchange for his soul, the boy takes his offer, the boy tells Andrea how his first wish was to meet the woman he kept dreaming about, which was Andrea, he didn't believe she exsisted he thought she was fictional in his mind, the boy reveals the two other wishes later on in the story.
I would just like everyone's opinion. people on Yahoo answers said that they want to read the whole story, so please give me your comments
Thank you!
Andrea - Female Vampire
Zack - Hero
Barracas - Cult leader
Serogos - "Demon" Soul extractor
The story is about a girl named Andrea, who is a vampire one sunny day when she is outisde in the shade, she's taking in the lovely summer breeze and starts to feel some compassion for being alive, but when a woman and her kid pass her by, she starts to hear dark horrible voices, telling her to kill them, she rushes back into her little cottage house and cries. Before Andrea was turned she was a nice quiet country girl, but a vampire cult chose her to become a wife of one of there vampires, but she ran away after she had changed.
Andrea decides that's she has had enough she goes on top of a city building and awaits the sun to take her life but a boy who sees her from below confronts her, at first she tells him to go away but he doesn't listen the boy learns that she's a vampire, she falls into his arms with tears drizzling down her face, the boy tells her that he will help her, the boy restrains Andrea from eating, Andrea starts to cough up blood the crave just gets worse and worse but the boy stays with her all the way, the boy as more than Andrea to worry about, when the Vampire cult turn up looking for her, the boy must protect Andrea from them.
In this story Andrea learns that the boy is dying she can't believe it, the boy tells her how a death god appraoched him with 3 wishes in exchange for his soul, the boy takes his offer, the boy tells Andrea how his first wish was to meet the woman he kept dreaming about, which was Andrea, he didn't believe she exsisted he thought she was fictional in his mind, the boy reveals the two other wishes later on in the story.
I would just like everyone's opinion. people on Yahoo answers said that they want to read the whole story, so please give me your comments
Thank you!