a 21st century man

[just mercedes]

authentic
Armani suit, Bruno Magli shoes
white bread wristwatch
privilege-bestowed expression
of distance and disdain

in his dreams at night
this distance disappears
he too sobs for what is lost
and what has never been
like any chastened garden child
who first meets death, and comprehends
the end of journey
in the beginning

he takes pills
for the tears on his cheeks
when he wakes

[Red-Headed]

authentic
Armani suit, Bruno Magli shoes
white bread wristwatch
privilege-bestowed expression
of distance and disdain

in his dreams at night
this distance disappears
he too sobs for what is lost
and what has never been
like any chastened garden child
who first meets death, and comprehends
the end of journey
in the beginning

he takes pills
for the tears on his cheeks
when he wakes

Yeah, excellent. I love the phrase 'white bread wristwatch'!

[PrinceMyshkin]

I too was taken with the phrase



white bread wristwatch

and I also liked "chastened garden child" very much. The quiet, almost reticent conclusion becomes more effective the more one thinks about it.