Am I Lucky (My first ever poem)

[sc9108]

I've never been in love, so I can't tell you what heartbreak feels like,
I've never been happy, so I can't tell you what sadness feels like,
I've never lost someone, nor gained someone for fear of losing them,
I can't tell if I'm happy,
Am I sad, or am I lucky?,


(I wrote it in under 10 minutes its just something i felt at the time,)

[sc9108]

Beauty is nothing more than a novelty,
Wears off and behind you see commonality,
People have faults and flaws,
But at least your not one of them skinny bores,

[ehs13]

That is actually a really good poem for under 10 minutes! :)

[a_little_wisp]

Ah, I like this. Good questions to ask yourself, and yet I feel, in a sense, that you arrived at an answer that isn't written there? I hope you love, find happiness, and experience loss (as strange as that may sound), in your future days - and I hope you keep writing.

One thing in the second poem - small typo, but it's only that: "commonality". Didn't get the floor bit, but I did like the poem and the theme in general, despite myself being a skinny twig (it is not, I tell you honestly, by choice). I do, however, find myself to be interesting, at least. :lol:

[sc9108]

Hiya glad you liked, And I've filled in the typo on the other one, :S thats what happens when you write at 2am lol,


Ah, I like this. Good questions to ask yourself, and yet I feel, in a sense, that you arrived at an answer that isn't written there? I hope you love, find happiness, and experience loss (as strange as that may sound), in your future days - and I hope you keep writing.

One thing in the second poem - small typo, but it's only that: "commonality". Didn't get the floor bit, but I did like the poem and the theme in general, despite myself being a skinny twig (it is not, I tell you honestly, by choice). I do, however, find myself to be interesting, at least. :lol:

Hiya thank you very much :), And I don't mean all skinny people in general :P just very vein people who have to rely on there looks and have nothing behind it,

[PrinceMyshkin]

I've never been in love, so I can't tell you what heartbreak feels like,
I've never been happy, so I can't tell you what sadness feels like,
I've never lost someone, nor gained someone for fear of losing them,
I can't tell if I'm happy,
Am I sad, or am I lucky?,


(I wrote it in under 10 minutes its just something i felt at the time,)

It's an interesting philosophical quandary!

[sc9108]

It's an interesting philosophical quandary!

Thank you very much :), I suppose I wanted to question is it a bad situation, In some ways yes but in others its quite lucky to not be hurt,

[blazeofglory]

This is so honest!

[sc9108]

This is so honest!

:] thank you

[Maximilianus]

I like how happy and lucky combine in verses four and five, both in sound and whole meaning. Nice way to express a felling in a ten-minute writing. Concise, meaningful, I like it. :)

[breathtest]

This is amazing please carry on writing poetry. It is a very self-pitying sentiment

[sc9108]

This is amazing please carry on writing poetry. It is a very self-pitying sentiment

I didn't do it as a seft pity piece just as a question, the pain we go through day to day in life makes us who we are and makes us know when we're happy and not would you trade it ? I wouldn't just because their is no happy without unhappy because we wouldn't feel it.

[Maximilianus]

I didn't do it as a seft pity piece just as a question, the pain we go through day to day in life makes us who we are and makes us know when we're happy and not would you trade it ? I wouldn't just because their is no happy without unhappy because we wouldn't feel it.

I wouldn't trade it either. I believe that we have to go through almost everything to have a better taste of life, be it bitter, be it sweet.

[sc9108]

I wouldn't trade it either. I believe that we have to go through almost everything to have a better taste of life, be it bitter, be it sweet.
Exactly, I think the painful times , although at that moment in time they seem horrible in long term they are what we remember even clearer than good times, I mean I always remember the bad times clearer than anything

[Maximilianus]

Exactly, I think the painful times , although at that moment in time they seem horrible in long term they are what we remember even clearer than good times, I mean I always remember the bad times clearer than anything

Happiness is easier. Bad times are what shape us and give us our final spirit ;) :)

[sc9108]

Happiness is easier. Bad times are what shape us and give us our final spirit ;) :)So true ! :)

[sc9108]

Now this isn't really poetry ,,,, but well its a mini description for a story I posted on here, I think their is some truth in this and just thought you might enjoy it,

''We don't know how unhappy we are until we get a glimpse of happiness that goes away before we can grasp it,''