- She the East; He the West -

[The Walker]

She was the east; he was the west.
Both walked toward a different place.

This brought to her, pain and regret.
Decided, she abandoned his sunset,
And walked east at her own pace.

With no clue and a little late,
He turned to her
Wanting to make her east his place.

But still
She was the east and he was the west.
There was no way to change
Their predestinated place.

Burning in love,
She just hoped.
Until he said, full of love,
“Walk with me to the North”

[PrinceMyshkin]

I don't much like being obliged to make one of those choices, but I did indeed like this.

[The Walker]

thanks prince!
i was waiting your comment. I'm happy i didnt get spelling corrections this time :)

thanks for voting in the poll anyway, i appretiate it!

[MorpheusSandman]

I would always say "keep learning and writing" to anyone; I liked it though because it reminds me of Romeo and Juliet - "North" could equal "afterlife".

[billl]

A really good poem, I thought. Nice ending!

[The Walker]

thank you! MorpheusSandman, it is the best comment i've ever received! i feel flattered, thanks.

Thanks Bill for your comment! it made my day.

please feel free to comment and specially to criticize, thank you :)

[billl]

Well, to be a little more specific, I thought maybe all was lost when you said he was "a little late", but then near the end she's still burning in love, clinging to hope, and ¡Viola! all the trouble can be put behind them, they just wipe the slate clean, and go in a new direction. Whew!

[The Walker]

My point was that at first, each one, at their own time, were pulling in the wrong direction, you see?

[billl]

Well, I could imagine all kinds of indecision and shyness or some kind pressure (peer, familial, cultural...?) against their union, when I read it ;).

[a_little_wisp]

Oh my god. So I read this on the blog, and my gracious, did I love it. The whole poem itself is just... a rich story, told in so few words. This was brilliant, Walker (and I'm glad she abandoned his sunset in the beginning, too, because that makes her so strong in my eyes!). The ending is one of those ringing last lines that stick with you, and hold on in the memory. Well done.

P.S. I wanted to put "I loved it." but I hit enter too fast. sorry! x.x

[The Walker]

Thank you so much little wisp! it means a lot coming from you.
*huge smile ;)*

[qimissung]

I loved it Walker, so much can be read into it. It's a beautiful idea with an ending that will stay with one.

However, you are still going to have to keep writing and learning; if you are alive to the world and experience, that's inevitable.

[amanda_isabel]

the sudden mention of the north after a lot of the east and west is refreshing and moving.
lovely poem :)

[AdrianLeverkuhn]

I loved this. The part about the sunset was a great connection to him being in the west. Very clever and poignant at the same time. I like the ending too but I have a question for you. Why not south? I don't think it's a problem at all I'm just curious.

[a_little_wisp]

I don't think it's a problem at all I'm just curious.

I giggled a bit.

I think, just think, I have an answer:

They could only go 'up' from there.

*SLAPS THIGH* Hahahaaa...oo, bad joke?

[The Walker]

qimissung- thank you very much! I dont think I'll ever stop writing, it is such a part of me :)

Amanda- I appretiate so much your comment. You are very kind.

Adrian- I love the part about his sunset too, It meant for me his back, you know? since he didnt notice her first. About the north...mmm... actualy it was due to a personal reason. For me it mean the right, the place to go and God itself. I couldnt put south on it hehe.

Little wisp-ok...you confused me a little bit there...Does the joke has a second meaning?? hahaha

[AdrianLeverkuhn]

Yea, there are so many things associated with North and South. I was just curious what North meant to you. In the everyday sense, at least where I live, North means cold weather and South is where everyone wants to go (Florida!). But when you say something or someone is "going south" it has a negative connotation (The team really went south once they lost their star player.) while "going north", as far as I know, doesn't have the corresponding positive connotation. Also, sometimes north and south are equated with up and down. In this case north could mean heaven while south is hell.

I'm just rambling now, sorry. Anyways, I really, really love this poem. I want to go North too.

[~Sophia~]

Hi Walker... I like the poem except for the overuse of the word "place". I find myself wondering why the writer didn't try a bit harder. I do like the premise and development though. Nicely done.

[The Walker]

Adrian- it is ok, it is nice to hear what you think. You made me laugh with the last sentence :D

Sofia- I appretiate your comment. I reread it and saw you are right...too many ''places".

[The Walker]

The best way to explain why I choose 'north' instead of south is a compass.
The north was for them their way to go, their direction, their salvation to their "problem" of place. As the fishermen need to find north in order to direct themselves, they needed to find north coz it was their path.