Steal this Poem

[PrinceMyshkin]

as you would the breath
of your brother or sister
if you thought you deserved it,
and exhale it as your own,
your own with undertones
of deceit, of your need for attention
at any cost, of contempt
for your God, your fellow men
and women and,
above all, for yourself.

[breathtest]

Wow, incredibly powerful portrayal of selfishness. A pleasure to read.

[Nightshade]

:D
I had a feeling more of this theme would be turning up.
I like the first part

as you would the breath
of your brother or sister
if you thought you deserved it,
and exhale it as your own,

Mind I do have a question the title shouldnt that be the first line rather than the title or do you count the title as the first line of a poem?

[zanna]

This is so evocative! Did they take you up on it?

[qimissung]

Yes, very powerful. I think I know what your referring to, but as with anything one writes, this can very well be applied to any selfish person and act. I encountered one this morining, and when I read this, that's what I thought of. Well done, Prince.

[PrinceMyshkin]

:D
I had a feeling more of this theme would be turning up.
I like the first part

Mind I do have a question the title shouldnt that be the first line rather than the title or do you count the title as the first line of a poem?

My titles are usually derived from the opening line as I don't like to caption my poems as if I were directing the reader how to interpret it. In this case, there was such fury in my taunt that I thought that reiterating it might take away from it.

[PrinceMyshkin]

This is so evocative! Did they take you up on it?

I'm not able to navigate around that site. I was hoping that poem would shame the plagiarist into stopping. I feel as violated and angry as I would at a thief who broke into my house and stained it by his or her presence.

Thanks for your appreciation.

[~Sophia~]

Hello Prince: as you requested:

http://forum.3rbdream.net/dream29/steal-this-poem-by-princemyshkin-jerry-newman-79587/#post80492

[Amylian]

nice catch Prince and I really understand how you feel about those who stole and might still be stealing your works. You know, that is WHY I am in here and not in some Arab sites, although we do have some in English. It is really pathetic and ridiculous what they're doing!

[PrinceMyshkin]

Hello Prince: as you requested:

http://forum.3rbdream.net/dream29/steal-this-poem-by-princemyshkin-jerry-newman-79587/#post80492

Thanks, I checked it out and am hoping that your comment after the poem will alienate that community from whoever was ripping us all off.

[AuntShecky]

nice catch Prince and I really understand how you feel about those who stole and might still be stealing your works. You know, that is WHY I am in here and not in some Arab sites, although we do have some in English. It is really pathetic and ridiculous what they're doing!

I wish I could speak, read, and write a second language as well as you can, Amylian.

[Amylian]

I wish I could speak, read, and write a second language as well as you can, Amylian.

Nah, I am just lucky I was born with Arabic tongue. As for speaking, I am much more reliable when it comes to writing than speaking. I do not know why, but I find it difficult to get indulged in a live discussion with a native speaker... :D

[PrinceMyshkin]

Nah, I am just lucky I was born with Arabic tongue. As for speaking, I am much more reliable when it comes to writing than speaking. I do not know why, but I find it difficult to get indulged in a live discussion with a native speaker... :D

My guess would be that you are a somewhat modest person and were brought up to believe you must strive for the highest standards in anything you do. Perhaps you might gain the necessary confidence if you began by speaking with some other Arabic speakers who want to practice their English?

[PrinceMyshkin]

Wow, incredibly powerful portrayal of selfishness. A pleasure to read.

Selfishness, I guess, with a mixture of amorality.

[blazeofglory]

as you would the breath
of your brother or sister
if you thought you deserved it,
and exhale it as your own,
your own with undertones
of deceit, of your need for attention
at any cost, of contempt
for your God, your fellow men
and women and,
above all, for yourself.

Of course I have stolen this and it is mine now.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Of course I have stolen this and it is mine now.

Imitation, it is said, is the sincerest form of flattery, but the theft of one's poem must be at least an equal honour! Thank you.