Stop the World I Want to Get Off

[Dark Muse]

Stop the World I Want to Get Off

We collect the scattered bits
that have been left behind
drained and unrefined

Reflecting upon scraps
which litter our door
while hoping for a glimpse
of that something more

Words drift by
among disjointed letters
without remorse
and without reason

Only a slice of
subjected curiosity
and a fistful of jaded
understanding

These are the things which create
a single shattered moment
bold lack of hesitation

To stand suddenly and completely
still, while everything surges around
lost in the crowd closing out
blank faces, there you are
finally alone.

[jinjang]

I like this one but I have to say I was disappointed a little bit.
With the title, I thought you are implying to burst out of the world, being sick of this dismal world. Nonetheless, I like it.

[Dark Muse]

Hehe yes, it is a bit more surreal in nature.

[Lokasenna]

I like it - I think the imagery really works, particularly:


Words drift by
among disjointed letters
without remorse
and without reason

However, should 'crow' be 'crowd' in the last stanza? If that's not a typo, then its a wee bit random!

[Dark Muse]

ahh yes, it should be crowd

Thank you

[Helga]

I like it a lot, feelings I know and you put them into words very well...