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Delta40
04-23-2009, 01:09 AM
I lose myself to the inner landscape

where the stark strewn passion
lacks lush pasture
of gold

oh where lays the moist earth
to plunge thy fingers deep

I sought to clutch you
and draw in your salty taste
from a dry well
of sand

Choke on my red ardour
of piti-fullness!

No oasis here but paradise is still within reach

Give me then release
before your eyes may see the time

It's grim dial etched in stone
as its hands caress an unspoken meaning

pushing you to the outer fringes of the scape
and I splash into tangible helplessness

Drive on!
Go!
don't Stop!

water divining limbs bend and work
quivering, vibrating, jerking
they drill into the core
seeking to quench a desire

scraping and scratching the earth
the umbrella of soft tissue is rent from our hands

Choke on me will you? just choke!

Fill this well!

See time in the way I know its otherness!

Don't stop!

~Sophia~
04-23-2009, 10:57 AM
I like this Delta. I can't tell you why, I just do.

Delta40
04-23-2009, 07:40 PM
Thanks. I'm really digging deep into myself atm.

Silas Thorne
04-23-2009, 07:58 PM
I'm a little worried about commenting on this poem here, Delta, as it seems so personal and sexual, and maybe I'll completely misinterpret it. Maybe other people will think this way too.

Stargazer86
04-23-2009, 08:09 PM
I'm a little worried about commenting on this poem here, Delta, as it seems so personal and sexual, and maybe I'll completely misinterpret it. Maybe other people will think this way too.

I agree, the subject matter seems a bit obscure. I wouldn't want to misinterpret it either. But I have to say I enjoyed reading it. The flow, the possible meanings etc. Very interesting. I like your strong, albeit brief use of alliteration in "where the stark strewn passion; lacks lush pasture..."

Delta40
04-24-2009, 03:33 AM
well I guess what I am trying to express is two people in a drought of passion - whose well is dry, but still they drill, painfully, tirelessly. against time and in the hope of striking gold each with an agenda that no longer corresponds with one another.

breathtest
04-24-2009, 02:35 PM
Archaic and abstruse, but definitely in a good way. I will read it plenty more times to continue trying to discern its meaning