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Zee.
04-18-2009, 07:08 AM
This isn't mine. But I want to know your views on it.

Deity comes home late
the lovely, tired little drunk
hair let loose and curling at the ends.
In the darkness of the living room,
and in her stocking feet,
she tiptoes to the couch
with exaggerated sneaking—
knees lifting almost to her chest
and arms outstretched like airplane wings—
to pass out limp and dreaming in her dress.

She does not see me in the doorway
a shadow leaning heavy on the frame,
the hollows of my eyes gone blue
a dozen years ago.

My vanity and my good looks
had the decency to leave together.
There is some mercy, after all, in our design:
a soft amnesia to the frequently mistreated, an adrenaline flare to the cornered and outnumbered, a flash of white light to the very nearly dead.

If I could sweep together all my scraps of time:
the leap years in my arms
and the hours lost in airplanes
flying east against the turning world,
I’d stitch them front to end
and weave a garland
like water lily crown,
lay it wet and heavy
on Deity’s spinning head of sun bleached hair.

Her even sleeping sounds
bounce lightly off the walls and floor
compounding ad infinitum
in the echo chamber of our home.

She is indifferent company,
member of the privileged caste
exempt from housework,
boredom,
and the sticky paper of intimate associations.

Still, I can’t resist the waif
flushed pink, and posed
exactly as she fell.

She is time-sick,
drunk and lovely.
I am just an incidental:
the kindly aging organism
that puts her down to bed

PrinceMyshkin
04-18-2009, 09:39 AM
She is indifferent company,
member of the privileged caste
exempt from housework,
boredom,
and the sticky paper of intimate associations.

This verse and especially "the sticky paper of intimate associations" stood out for me in this extraordinary, vivid account of this relationship.

~Sophia~
04-18-2009, 10:01 AM
This poem is simply marvelousl limajean. I think it's about a parent and a teen. I could be wrong but, I remember watching my daughter come home after a night out with friends and this poem brought back a lot of those memories.

Does it have a title and can you tell us who wrote it?


My vanity and my good looks
had the decency to leave together.
There is some mercy, after all, in our design:
a soft amnesia to the frequently mistreated, an adrenaline flare to the cornered and outnumbered, a flash of white light to the very nearly dead.

If I could sweep together all my scraps of time:
the leap years in my arms
and the hours lost in airplanes
flying east against the turning world,
I’d stitch them front to end
and weave a garland
like water lily crown,
lay it wet and heavy
on Deity’s spinning head of sun bleached hair.

I love, love, love those lines!

PrinceMyshkin
04-18-2009, 10:06 AM
Yes, I too would like to know who wrote it, but my guess is that it's about a lesbian relationship.

Zee.
04-18-2009, 11:25 AM
Actually written by a high school kid. A guy called Alex Banuelos.
It was an Al Young spoken word/poetry competition

PrinceMyshkin
04-18-2009, 12:22 PM
Ah, that negates my conjecture of a lesbian relationship. Although you posted that it wasn't by you I read it as if the persona were female. It was a good poem as it was - but knowing that it's by a high-school kid raises it even higher in my estimation.

Sapphire
04-18-2009, 01:30 PM
Wow, somebody who's still in high school wrote this?! He must have quite an eye for "getting older" ...

I have to say that I do not really know how to place Deity. At first, I thought Deity to be some kind of goddess, and I guess she is but rather a wonderful girl than really a supernatural being. But if she's the child, why is she "exempt from homework"? Has she maybe come home after her graduation party?

Well, it does not really matter - it's a wonderful poem all in all.

Thanks for sharing, Sapphire.

LadyW
04-19-2009, 06:17 AM
Wow, it's beautiful... all of it.
:)