Second Look at the invisible Me

[Delta40]

I am here. In this space. Now


I can remember
love blinded me
New sight
dulled the senses
and coloured the shades
when the time came
to pull them down
Thats is when you left
I knew it was clear
this twenty vision
Looking at me

This face in lieu
rounded by pottery hands
Looked to sea and inward fell
and moulded the shape
of the outer case
Oh hind!
my sight
vision twenty
Mist

[PrinceMyshkin]

I do indeed like this, better than the last version. It's strong without trying to over-power.

[Delta40]

I don't know what I'm trying to say here