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Redneck101
04-10-2009, 12:50 AM
Hi, I got this account because I wanted some help to tear something apart.

So we have a 'Religion' that is based off these four tenets.
And following these four tenets they worship a Godess.

So, if you will please, find something wrong in the Religions tenets, that disproves it.


Thank you,
Redneck.

Know you the Love of the Light: In your heart and in your mind, |
| let the true love of the Light shine. Be generous with the blessings |
| given onto you and show compassion to those souls in need. Waylumi |
| holds Her heart not for wickedness, but forgives those who are earnest |
| and welcomes them into the salvation of the Light. Those who have lived |
| boldly in its righteous way, by choice or by teaching are blessed among |
| the Light for their love shown in devotion. More blessed still are those |
| who shall turn away from the darkness to see the ever living day. |
| Stand firm together with unity to be a strong fellowship that spreads |
| the love of Waylumi within and without. |
| |
| Know you the Honor of the Light: Walk bold with truth in hand and |
| free forever be within the light of the path from the lies and wicked |
| dealings of the darkness. Refuse the temptation to adopt its ways, for |
| darkness only creates darkness. When the light dims, shadow follows |
| close behind. Walk firm knowing justice and freedom in the good |
| marked path, for it holds not the tricking snares of lies or deceits |
| but the truth that is the Light's salvation. Let every act, word, and |
| deed shine with the honor befitting followers of Waylumi. Be a |
| protection to the weak and show them the way of Light so they |
| too will shine. |
| |
| Know the Wisdom of the Light: Be wise in the ways of the Light of |
| the path. Discern with keen eyes and an open heart the truth of all |
| things illuminated. Stand firm holding the Light in one hand, the rod |
| of Truth in the other. With these you shall see the hidden grasp of |
| darkness, and behold its gnarled touch shall be driven from you. Do |
| not let thyself be hasty in showing violence upon others, but always |
| be quick to show the love of Waylumi. Show compassion where compassion |
| must reign, but know true when the time has come to fight. Be as the |
| dove with mace in claw. A path of peace you walk, but always must you |
| be prepared to defend the Light and the cause of the Divine Lady. If |
| you are humble in spirit the way shall always shine forth to you. |
| |
| Know the Vigilance of the Light: The Light is ever watchful, shining |
| Eternal from all things that shine with illumination, both within and |
| without. Hold courage and valor in your hearts to shield yourself and |
| others from the darkness that seeks to destroy. Fear not the dark for in |
| victory thou shalt gain the lands but in defeat thou shalt be called up |
| toWaylumi and become a part of the Light itself. Thou shall dwell within |
| the heavens where the immortal battle is waged and the true victory is |
| won. So with zeal and fervor rule the day and bring radiance to the |
| night.



Have fun!

NikolaiI
04-10-2009, 12:57 AM
I didn't mean to post, sorry.

Redneck101
04-10-2009, 01:00 AM
lol how do you not mean to post. And you are right. But I need something to argue that does not require knowing is followers or meeting them.

kevinthediltz
04-10-2009, 01:34 AM
Can I ask why exactly you feel the need to poke holes in this?
Your anger to it makes me think you are envyous. I like arguing as much as the next guy but unless this group is dangerous in some way I feel no need to help you disprove something for your own glory. And I discourage anyone else from doing so.
This forum is for the disscussion of literature, not a place for you to get help disgracing other people for the hell of it.

Redneck101
04-10-2009, 01:43 AM
This is not a real religion, it is a made up one on a MUD game I play online.
A roleplay game. And one of my characters is tasked to disprove the tenets of this religion. I just dont have time and im honestly not smart enough hence I came here for some pro help. Dude just give a guy a helping hand

kevinthediltz
04-10-2009, 01:46 AM
So this is like a game?

NikolaiI
04-10-2009, 03:15 AM
Know you the Love of the Light: In your heart and in your mind, |
| let the true love of the Light shine. Be generous with the blessings |
| given onto you and show compassion to those souls in need. Waylumi |
| holds Her heart not for wickedness, but forgives those who are earnest |
| and welcomes them into the salvation of the Light.

The best I can do is: a vague introduction to the Goddess Waylumi, begins and ends with a reference to the Light, but says little about them. The middle sentence is a general type of commandment, perhaps, which is good but is very vague. The paragraph should be about the Light, since that is what is mentioned in the first sentence. The question which arose after the first sentence is, "Does the Light exist?", or "What is the Light?" After either of these is decided, more about the Light or the Goddess should be discussed further. In actuality, there is very little or nothing given to this religion, as this paragraph has a structure clearly constructed all at once, and not something which contains the work and practice of many generations.

This was just a paragraph written, and not a culture and religion lived for centuries, that much is apparent if one delves into it.


Those who have lived |
| boldly in its righteous way, by choice or by teaching are blessed among |
| the Light for their love shown in devotion. More blessed still are those |
| who shall turn away from the darkness to see the ever living day. |
| Stand firm together with unity to be a strong fellowship that spreads |
| the love of Waylumi within and without. |

| Know you the Honor of the Light: Walk bold with truth in hand and |
| free forever be within the light of the path from the lies and wicked |
| dealings of the darkness. Refuse the temptation to adopt its ways, for |
| darkness only creates darkness. When the light dims, shadow follows |
| close behind.

Again the same criticism as the first. These are vague injunctions but they are not Four tenaments of a religion.