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The Walker
03-31-2009, 10:45 PM
So many things come by.
So many things are brought with the time.
So many new things fill our minds.

In the middle of that rush, smiles, and life;
I keep trying hard not to forget the past.
Sometimes, when you look back
It’s not clear as it was.

My memories...
Deep inside of me I don’t want them to go away
So I run back to embrace them;
But each time they look smaller and farther away
I just want to live them again.

A big part of me is scared;
Scared that they will completely fade away some day.
I’m scared to have so many things between us as to come back to them.

Don’t let me loose them;
Let them live forever within me,
Because I love them.

I don’t want to forget.

skib
04-01-2009, 12:44 AM
Aw, Walker, this is beautiful! It is sad, how memories you swore you would never forget seem to fade with time. I'm sure you will never forget completely, though!
Only a few suggestions- farer should be farther, and the last line of the second to last full section "I'm scare to have" should probably be "I'm scared to have."
But all in all, this is a wonderful piece!

MissScarlett
04-01-2009, 11:01 AM
It's a beautiful poem. Touches a chord. I feel the same way.

The Walker
04-01-2009, 05:23 PM
Thank you! I'm surprised you have liked it. (I was a little unsecure to post this one)
Thank you skib, it is always helpful to have some grammar correction :)