Easter

[ampoule]

Easter

I opened some Christmas cards yesterday,
Took the tree down last week,
Watched the robin listening to the cold, hard ground,
And I thought,
Am I the one holding up spring?

What if those cards held important news,
A year's-worth letter, pictures,
Merry greetings that could have cheered me,
And I thought,
Am I the one holding up spring?

The tree, lights not lit in months,
Its dust-covered luster, thirsty,
Beloved ornaments, nine month rest,
And I thought,
Am I the one holding up spring?

What frozen worm could entice the robin,
Like me, waiting to be plucked from this sleep,
My hibernation, my warm cocoon, waiting,
And I thought,
Am I the one holding up spring?

ampoule, March ThirtyFirst, TwoThousandNine

[PrinceMyshkin]

The whole of this has that confident, truthful Ampoulean strength and beauty, but this


What frozen worm could entice the robin,

could easily break a heart or two!

[ampoule]

Git over here and let me kiss you!;):D Thank you.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Git over here and let me kiss you!;):D Thank you.

Jes what would Gene Autry say about that?

[Silas Thorne]

Excellent work.:) That last stanza, yes, particularly that line above is terrific. And I also loved the richness of the language at the beginning of the third stanza.

But I'm wondering about third stanza. While I like it poetically, I feel it is a little disjointed compared to the relatively direct statements of the other stanzas, and doesn't seem to match the feel of the other sections, particularly the 'Beloved ornaments, nine month rest,' line. But that's just me.

I'm a little nitpicky here, I suppose. But overall, it's a wonderful poem.

[Virgil]

It is a nice poem Amp. The repetition of the last line works well. I wll admit I'm a ittle disjointed too on that third stanza. I'm confused by nine months rest, and I also thought the title would lend itself in the poem, which I didnt see. I suppose that's the next holiday arriving and so I think I understand that. I rally liked the fourth stanza best. The little drama with the worm leads me into the poem.

[ampoule]

Jes what would Gene Autry say about that?

Ha ha...probably not very much seeins' how he's done bought the farm and all. I can tell you are not much of a country boy, my sweet Prince. ;)

[ampoule]

Excellent work.:) That last stanza, yes, particularly that line above is terrific. And I also loved the richness of the language at the beginning of the third stanza.

But I'm wondering about third stanza. While I like it poetically, I feel it is a little disjointed compared to the relatively direct statements of the other stanzas, and doesn't seem to match the feel of the other sections, particularly the 'Beloved ornaments, nine month rest,' line. But that's just me.

I'm a little nitpicky here, I suppose. But overall, it's a wonderful poem.

Nothing wrong with nitpicky at all. I thank you Silas for taking the time to read and comment. 2,3, & 4 stanzas each refer back to the opening stanza. Nine months from now I will be decorating for Christmas once again. I'm kind of goofy about my ornaments. I really do love them.

[ampoule]

It is a nice poem Amp. The repetition of the last line works well. I wll admit I'm a ittle disjointed too on that third stanza. I'm confused by nine months rest, and I also thought the title would lend itself in the poem, which I didnt see. I suppose that's the next holiday arriving and so I think I understand that. I rally liked the fourth stanza best. The little drama with the worm leads me into the poem.

Thank you very much Virgil. The nine month rest is referring to next Christmas being nine months away. The title 'Easter' has everything to do with the poem. You see, here it is Easter and I haven't even gotten over Christmas. And, the cocoon is a symbol of the resurrection. Hope that makes more sense now. :)

[firefangled]

Easter

I opened some Christmas cards yesterday,
Took the tree down last week,
Watched the robin listening to the cold, hard ground,
And I thought,
Am I the one holding up spring?

What if those cards held important news,
A year's-worth letter, pictures,
Merry greetings that could have cheered me,
And I thought,
Am I the one holding up spring?

The tree, lights not lit in months,
Its dust-covered luster, thirsty,
Beloved ornaments, nine month rest,
And I thought,
Am I the one holding up spring?

What frozen worm could entice the robin,
Like me, waiting to be plucked from this sleep,
My hibernation, my warm cocoon, waiting,
And I thought,
Am I the one holding up spring?

ampoule, March ThirtyFirst, TwoThousandNine

A crocus of a poem in its rich images, which answers its own question: Spring rises in you, Ampoule.

The matter-of-fact opening line is a brilliant hook. It places us square in the state and time you go on to describe.

I love the way you used these seasonal artifacts to show the suspension or hibernation of a life between the holly and the hollyhocks.

[ampoule]

I hate to get all gushy but that's exactly how your comment, dear firefangled, has made me feel. Thank you. Ah Spring!

[~Sophia~]

Ampoule, gosh I hope this poem isn't coming from a personal place. When I read it I did not actually think of spring. I read it as a powerful metaphoric glimpse into depression and the feeling of defeat. It had quite an impact! Thanks for the great read!! Hope the Easter bunny leaves you lot's of yummy treats!

[ampoule]

Ampoule, gosh I hope this poem isn't coming from a personal place. When I read it I did not actually think of spring. I read it as a powerful metaphoric glimpse into depression and the feeling of defeat. It had quite an impact! Thanks for the great read!! Hope the Easter bunny leaves you lot's of yummy treats!

And the prize goes to......you. But I'm okay.

[a_little_wisp]

Ampoule gu brath. *kissu* I know the feeling. My tree's still up.

Agreeing with Firefangled: "Spring rises in you, Ampoule."

"Am I the one holding in spring?" Is like the echo from my own mind, worded a little differently. This is wonderful, dear.

[ampoule]

Thank you littlewisp. Your comments mean a lot to me.

I never thought about this until you said 'holding IN spring' but my use of holding UP spring is probably wrong. I mean it in the sense of holding BACK spring. Do you think people understand what I mean? I know I talk funny-like, sort of a Georgia/Tex/Cali mix. ;)