i do, do you?

[wazzup420]

Tell me what you think!!! I wrote this for markus!! I love you!!!

I like you,
I'm hoping you like me too,
I dream bout you,
I think about you,
everyday it's you I want to be with,
You once told me that you need to find the right girl,
Why can't you see it's me,
I'm the right girl,
You know I will be there for you,
You know I won't use you like others have,
You can trust me, I'm not like that,
So do you like me, like I like you,
Do you dream about me, like I dream about you,
Do you think about me at all,
Do you want to be with me everyday?
Do you think I will ever be the right girl
Do you think I will ever be the girl you are looking for?

[mono]

Hello, welcome to the forum, wazzup420.
Generally, the forum administrators and moderators recommend you post original poetry here, in the 'Personal Poetry' section:http://www.online-literature.com/forums/forumdisplay.php?f=14
You may get more responses there.
Your poem expresses a great amount of sentiment with the most "straight-forward," concrete words, making it easily relatable and understandable for readers of all kinds; each line break (caesura) consistently separates each thought, though, keep in mind, every line you do not have to write a sentence, as one entire thought can stretch through a whole poem.
To add more vivacity and alterations in the poem, I would recommend more use of poeticisms as simile, metaphor, oxymoron, and other techniques that further make the reader perceive creatively.
Thanks for sharing. :)

[wazzup420]

thanks so much!!! well, i like how it is wrote because i wrote it in my own words, and the way i express my feelings, and it is simple, and that is how i feel. I am a simple kinda girl