superpeople (a weird poem)

[Silas Thorne]

Superpeople move mountain
flashy *****slap the terrorist threat
with lightning palms red skin or surging
with the coolness of the toothy dead
the smily happy blooddrinkers,
shoot me round corners back to the capital
before breakfast, arm flying up boldly Yo ho!

Dayday kungfu practice makes us supremely ultimate
eight hour training is best
or cybernetic enhancement perhaps, having money,
also taking lots of super drugs
better to test first on people, be nice to animals.

But watching magic wonderbattles
soft in pleasant couchdom
only needs cost/energy of lifting a finger
or by online subscription or download.

[PrinceMyshkin]

What the aitch! Didn't understand a word of it but enjoyed the play of syllable after syllable.

[alestar89]

What the aitch! Didn't understand a word of it but enjoyed the play of syllable after syllable.

I'll say... I like that a way you can follow the poem is through the connection between words. But... aside from that, while I GET what you're talking about, it's hard to distinguish. Best to clarify the imagery, if you'd be willing...

[jon1jt]

It's not a 'weird poem,' it doesn't want to be a poem.

Seriously, it reads like you tore a bunch of words from a children's magazine or comic strip and threw them in the air and when they landed on the rug where your dog peed last week you went, Ahhhhh! I would love to tell you that this piece is shrouded in some deeper meaning, but you know it's not true. You're probably chuckling as you read this, you're goofing on us, I'm sure of it.

Keep talking about 'superpeople' and wonderbattles and I'm going to call you Captain America. ;)

[Silas Thorne]

It's not a 'weird poem,' it doesn't want to be a poem.

Seriously, it reads like you tore a bunch of words from a children's magazine or comic strip and threw them in the air and when they landed on the rug where your dog peed last week you went, Ahhhhh! I would love to tell you that this piece is shrouded in some deeper meaning, but you know it's not true. You're probably chuckling as you read this, you're goofing on us, I'm sure of it.

Keep talking about 'superpeople' and wonderbattles and I'm going to call you Captain America. ;)

:lol: Love the way you put that! :) Was just playing with evil illogical Chinglish and pop culture: comic book movies, Heroes, and fantasy wish fulfillment. There is no message but this, and little grammar. I'm glad no one told me it was wonderful or I'd eat some magic mushrooms and write a shopping list with rabbits and unicorns product number 12 and post it as a poem. ;)

[a_little_wisp]

Whether or not this was slapped together -

Someone please save those intelligent boys from wasting away their lives on WoW.

Please, no more artificial heroes for this world.

-- Wait, that's a message, right? :D