Dramatic Monologue

[qimissung]

The Prince of Cats

We glide into the night, my friends and I
Indistinguishable from one another
Our voices echoing off the night wind
And each others’ faces
We get buzzed
The elixir of our manhood pillages my tongue
Reaches into crevices and washes out
The dregs of my psyche onto the night

We talk
The firelight of our conversation
Flickers on the faces of my friends
I am their reflected light
The shine of oil and water
On the street
The moon on the fast-moving clouds
The ping of headlights on the
Fender of our car
I glimmer and I'm gone

It’s night and I am the Prince of Cats
The road and I converge
Our massive muscles writhing
As we unfurl our sinuous tail
Lashing across the wasted landscape
The car careens
What did I leave behind?
Who did I escape?
My lungs plummet into the absolute zero of space

Dazed I look around
Reach out
Take
I don’t where I am
But I know that I’ll be doing this again

[qimissung]

The above submitted poem is an example of a Dramatic Monologue, and is the chosen form for the current Form Poetry Contest, which can be found in the 'Poetry Games and Contest' section. "The Prince of Cats" is MY example-I think it's O.K. as a poem, but is only an average example of a Dramatic Monologue. I would like some feedback on it, but please be kind!

I would also like to invite and challenge my fellow poets to enter the contest; it closes April 2. We have several excellent entrants at this point. There is more information and several examples of how to write this form in the thread. Be brave, accept the challenge! And thanks for your input...

[PrinceMyshkin]

Whether it fully subscribes to the form or not, it's a very interesting instance of how a poet can work in some voice as different as possible from her usual one...

[Delta40]

I thought it was breathtaking and stimulating. I'm no critic but it put me in mind of my ginger Tom who will get caught in the glare of the lights derive high excitement from the thrill of nearly losing one of his precious lives!

thanks

[qimissung]

Thank You, Prince. It's good and challenging to attempt to write in a different voice. It gives meaning to the idea of stretching and growing, which is not always comfortable.

[qimissung]

Thank You Delta; I like the image of your thrill-seeking cat (I have a thrill-seeking feline of my own :)).