Waiting For Dawn

[Mathor]

Do you remember the Spring-
Gazing upon the days
that once we knew?
Where is the boy
that bathed in blue?
Maybe he's still there
draped on the roof.

Waiting-
That you'll come by this night
and swim in the paradise
under the moon.

Hurry up-
He's leaving soon.

EDIT: ahh. i meant to post this is personal poetry.

[breathtest]

This is really mysterious...i like it...

i would probably have left out the final two lines. The rhyme at the end seems forced to me.

but thas just me, right? You may disagree.

Good job. Post more!