An Argument at Dinner

[Cellar Door]

Orbits interrupted-
Everyone looked
as you shattered my stars
I clung to my moon
So you shook that too

I looked up through my tears-
You had a Picasso face
listing down your neck
I pushed over my soup bowl
in order to catch it
before it stained the carpet

We sat in the restaurant
Surrounded by strangers-
who were tiny space travelers
each in their own rocket-ship-table
Exploring each others galaxies

But you wouldn't look at me-
wouldn't traverse my milky way
So
I drank your face for dinner
even though you said you're sorry

[qimissung]

What beautiful imagery!

[blp]

This is great. Maybe the best I've read of yours.

[Cellar Door]

Thanks Qimi and Blp, glad you enjoyed it. I thought it was kind of weird, but it stuck with me so I had to post it.

[Silas Thorne]

This one is really good.
'I clung to my moon..' and 'drank your face for dinner' . Wow! And the part about the Picasso face and catching it before it reached the carpet. Great stuff!

[PrinceMyshkin]

Great images and flow throughout this - and not one of the images feels contrived or as if it were calling attention to itself.

[Cellar Door]

Thank you for your kind responses Silas and Prince! Much appreciated.

[firefangled]

We sat in the restaurant
Surrounded by strangers-
who were tiny space travelers
each in their own rocket-ship-table
Exploring each others galaxies



The entire poem is excellent! but this was my favorite place you took us.

[~Sophia~]

I clung to my moon
So you shook that too
____________________

I looked up through my tears-
You had a Picasso face
____________________

Surrounded by strangers-
who were tiny space travelers
each in their own rocket-ship-table
Exploring each others galaxies
_____________________

I drank your face for dinner
even though you said you're sorry
______________________________
Give me sweet lies and keep your bitter truths

I've highlighted the lines I loved best (well 2/3rds of the poem actually) including your signature line that seemed to flow with the rest.

Very well done!

[Cellar Door]

Thank you firefangled and sofia- truly, I blush :blush: