The morning wrote me a poem

[PrinceMyshkin]

The morning wrote me a poem.
The sun rained down metaphors
like a moderately drunk fool.

I saw couplets
braced against the nippy wind,
propping each other
against the islanded ice
of the sidewalk, tercets,
quatrains, and here and there

a solitary soul, pensive,
provocative, as intriguing
to try to read as the noble
last line of a great mystical poem.

[Mr. Bergstrom]

I liked this, it's something I wouldn't attempt to write, but you seemed to have pulled it off. I loved the last stanza, very intriguing!

[PrinceMyshkin]

I liked this, it's something I wouldn't attempt to write, but you seemed to have pulled it off. I loved the last stanza, very intriguing!

I would hope indeed you wouldn't attempt to write it - as I already did!

Reminds me of a time when I hadn't written any poems in quite a while but as I was driving somewhere, I sensed something - a rhythm perhaps - that I recognized as the onset of a poem. Quite excited, I pulled over so that I might write as much of it down as came to me, but

[obscenity]! it was the poem "Intimations," which I had already written many years before, so I couldn't write it again!

I have been enjoying your insightful, enthusiastic responses to many of the threads here.

[Silas Thorne]

:)
I think this is an interesting poem, and particularly like the way the second and third stanzas tie together, and the idea of the couplet braced against the wind.

I am a little confused by the last line though. To me anyway, it seems too much to repeat 'poem' again in the last line.

I was just wondering if the first line could change to 'This morning wrote me a poem'. This way it could come out like a statement 'I wrote me a poem', but also 'this' wouldn't lose the sense of 'the morning', at least from my perspective standing here.

Hope you don't mind me making the suggestion.

[AuntShecky]

Don't change a word.

[PrinceMyshkin]

:)
I think this is an interesting poem, and particularly like the way the second and third stanzas tie together, and the idea of the couplet braced against the wind.

I am a little confused by the last line though. To me anyway, it seems too much to repeat 'poem' again in the last line.

I was just wondering if the first line could change to 'This morning wrote me a poem'. This way it could come out like a statement 'I wrote me a poem', but also 'this' wouldn't lose the sense of 'the morning', at least from my perspective standing here.

Hope you don't mind me making the suggestion.

I doubt I would ever mind a suggestion from you but in this case I'm not persuaded about either of the suggestions you make. Thanks.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Don't change a word.

A touch reminiscent of Rodgers & Hart? http://www.lyricsfreak.com/f/frank+sinatra/my+funny+valentine_20055420.html

[thinkingsam]

Goodness. I really love this one. The imagery is beautiful; I really love that solitary soul. Keep writing these lovely pieces :)

[qimissung]

I love how you shared the day with a solitary soul and bits of poetry on a wintry street corner! A very cozy feeling, despite the cold.

[kiz_paws]

The morning wrote me a poem.
The sun rained down metaphors
like a moderately drunk fool.

I saw couplets
braced against the nippy wind,
propping each other
against the islanded ice
of the sidewalk, tercets,
quatrains, and here and there

a solitary soul, pensive,
provocative, as intriguing
to try to read as the noble
last line of a great mystical poem.

I liked how you compared the makings of poems to the people groups you saw -- brilliant! And then that last verse, left me feeling pretty good, as I always do when I leave one of your poems. Did I mention how lovely that opening line was, too? ;)

[PrinceMyshkin]

Since no one has remarked on that yet, may I point out that the last line of my poem is a tribute to firefangled's last, magnificent poem: http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?t=42238, with its soaring, Biblical last line.

[kiz_paws]

:nod: Indeed :nod:

[firefangled]

Loved it title to last period.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Loved it title to last period.

But did you, for heaven's sake, recognize the poem I was referring to in the closing two lines!

http://www.online-literature.com/forums/showthread.php?t=42238

[firefangled]

Actually, I thought you were making a general reference.

I don't know what to say except thank you again.