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Martini
03-01-2009, 03:07 AM
Dear person I fell inlove with too late,

Your Penn State t-shirt. The one you gave me, the one I always liked. I washed your scent out of it. It no longer reminds me of carburetor or carbon monoxide. I’m not sure what else I have of yours. Maybe the bell jar, but that doesn’t hold any real meaning. I guess, her name being Esther and that you always wanted me to read it means enough. I have the boxes with in boxes, that finally unraveled Conan O’brian tickets for my 26th birthday during that awful year. I have Conan, only Conan is not the same. New time slot new dude. I have spinach rolls, and the memory of sharing one with you. I have videos and many pictures. They all make me miss you. Not having you at 5 am makes me the most upset. I think that’s when I miss you most. Every night I have the urge to call you and wake you up. I miss laughing with you. I miss your sense of ****ing humor. I miss your listening, your pretending not to listen. Although, I really did always think you were a dick when you did that. I wanna talk to you about 30 rock. I bet you like that show. We would talk about that show. You would let me tell you what I liked about it and you would humor me. I miss your self loathing and me crunching honey bunches of oats in your ear. I wanna fall asleep on the phone with you. I miss you loving me. I miss you checking on me. I miss you not caring about me. I miss your laugh. I miss you strangely. Even though I have these things I still miss you. Why aren’t they enough? Why is it too much? Shouldn’t I be satisfied? I have these things, they are all I have left of you.

novelsryou
03-01-2009, 10:38 PM
You can really feel the girls pain in that...

1n50mn14
03-01-2009, 10:58 PM
I'm not trying to be terrible, but I really dislike this. This is just like a letter you've actually written to a boyfriend, or an ex, not a piece of literature. It's stereotypical and cliche.

Martini
03-02-2009, 01:16 AM
I'm not trying to be terrible, but I really dislike this. This is just like a letter you've actually written to a boyfriend, or an ex, not a piece of literature. It's stereotypical and cliche.


hey... you're not terrible, you're honest. Cliches are cliches for a reason, no? But alas I appreciate that you took the time to read it and type a response. You're right, this is actually one of those letters, I heard something and i couldn't fall asleep until i got some crap off my chest. I have no idea what I wanted to say, i have no idea if i said it. I don't think i did though, cause i didnt feel any better afterwards. i dont even know why i posted it. i wanted someone to talk to i guess and this was my way...

1n50mn14
03-02-2009, 01:17 AM
Get a few more posts in, and then you can start a blog ;) It's the best thing in the world for getting crap off of your chest. I'm sorry if I've offended you.

Martini
03-02-2009, 01:25 AM
Get a few more posts in, and then you can start a blog ;) It's the best thing in the world for getting crap off of your chest. I'm sorry if I've offended you.


This is going to seem defensive but why would I wanna start a blog, that would require more effort than I am ever willing to give. This was a one time kind of thing... But I do hope that I haven't ruined my credibility on here and that you continue to read my posts and comment on the short stories I attempt to write. I am not offended at all. I am crediting your keen observations and coming clean.

mmaria
03-02-2009, 06:57 AM
I like your story for its shortness and, along with it, for its conciseness. When you write a very short story, putting all your feelings about the subject you are writing about into it, then it has a stronger effect upon readers.
And, from my own experience, I would add boxing his shirts, too. :lol: