Pending Approval

[~Sophia~]

Pending Approval

There is a church I pass on the way to town. 

Hoping to hit a red light (annoying the drivers
behind me) I break, lost in the sheer
esotericism of the cut glass pyramid 

atop the pitched roof. Not a wooden
cross with bloodstained skewers 

but a crystal volcano I swear hurls the
innocent, the forgiven and the virtuous
directly to heaven.

Turn up "Sweet Jane" for the hundredth time

"The whole world's coming to an end, Mal."
"I see angels, Mickey. They're comin' down
for us from heaven.”

and remember the way you kissed.
Outlaw lips daring the bullet
to holster the gun. Michelangelo’s
revolution on the chapel wall - an
angel posse gathering on the ceiling -

the light turns and I think of you there,

sensibly praying for the crusades to begin.
Waiting for just one sign that today is the day 

you take your place among the chosen
and drive on.

[PrinceMyshkin]

Pending Approval

There is a church I pass on the way to town. 

Hoping to hit a red light (annoying the drivers
behind me) I break, lost in the sheer
esotericism of the cut glass pyramid 

atop the pitched roof. Not a wooden
cross with bloodstained skewers 

but a crystal volcano I swear hurls the
innocent, the forgiven and the virtuous
directly to heaven.

turn up "Sweet Jane" for the hundredth time

"The whole world's coming to an end, Mal."
"I see angels, Mickey. They're comin' down
for us from heaven.”

and remember the way you kissed.
Outlaw lips daring the bullet
to holster the gun. Michelangelo’s
revolution on the chapel wall - an
angel posse gathering on the ceiling -

the light turns and I think of you there,

sensibly praying for the crusades to begin.
Waiting for just one sign that today is the day 

you take your place among the chosen
and drive on.

My God, woman, you so often write as if you're in a state of ecstasy. I'd like to elevate this to the Favourite Poems thread but only after you clarify for me whether break (italicized!) is deliberate in place of "brake." If it is, I missed the point.

[Lokasenna]

Wow. Just wow. That really is quite something...

[~Sophia~]

Prince, think heart brake LOL. Break is intentional but both mean the same thing. We come to a stop. Thanks for your very special way of making someone feel terrific!

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Lokasenna, hello and thanks so much - all in one breath!

[qimissung]

Wow. I love the interweaving of religious and secular symbolism...the casual,almost off-the-cuff tone, the agony and the ecstasy, as it were...

[a_little_wisp]

Darling, how do you do it?! A million thoughts in one instant, whole centuries - because that's how it really is, isn't it? - and emotions so skillfully expressed. I love it all.

[Virgil]

:D Very good. The shift works!! I particularly love this part:

... Not a wooden
cross with bloodstained skewers 

but a crystal volcano I swear hurls the
innocent, the forgiven and the virtuous
directly to heaven.
I love the series, " the innocent, the forgiven, and the virtuous..." I am so endeared to a triple series in writing and this is an excellent one! By the way I like the old fashion way of punctuating a series where there is a comma between the second to last and the last of the series. But modern style seems to drop that comma. The guy there in the poem whom the narrator kissed seems like quite a character. :)

[~Sophia~]

Hey qimissung! Thanks! I think most of us walk the line. Believe, don't believe... it's complicated. The agony and the ecstasy is spot on. Thank you for reading and commenting!
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Wisp (I refuse to call you little). That is how it is. Love you!

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Virgil, I am old school when it comes to those "damned rules". Thanks for noticing! Some say 3 are too many but I say.... what? Thanks for putting aside the "new" and just reading! (and I wouldn't tell anyone but you but, the kisser in poem was quite something ... once)

[Virgil]

Virgil, I am old school when it comes to those "damned rules". Thanks for noticing! Some say 3 are too many but I say.... what? Thanks for putting aside the "new" and just reading! (and I wouldn't tell anyone but you but, the kisser in poem was quite something ... once)

Three too many? No way. One is an act of simplicity. Two is a balance, a sense of harmony. Three is a progression in search of full definition. They each have their place, but the rhythm of a triple beat shows a human mind at work. :D

[~Sophia~]

but the rhythm of a triple beat shows a human mind at work. :D

the innocent, the virtuous and the forgiven are the key to this poem. Thank you for highlighting that!!!!!

[PrinceMyshkin]

Prince, think heart brake LOL. Break is intentional but both mean the same thing. We come to a stop. Thanks for your very special way of making someone feel terrific!

I don't make no one feel special, no how! They either are or they ain't but of course sometime it just needs to be pointed out to them.

[~Sophia~]

Prince, I actually said you have a special way of making someone feel terrific! Like, posting this poem on the favourites thread. Now that definitely made me feel especially terrific. You are one great guy. http://www.websmileys.com/sm/happy/059.gif

[Dori]

and remember the way you kissed.
Outlaw lips daring the bullet
to holster the gun. Michelangelo’s
revolution on the chapel wall - an
angel posse gathering on the ceiling -

This is my favorite stanza. :) Though, really, I love all of it.

[~Sophia~]

Hi Dori, I just noticed that your profile tag and mine could be the start of an interesting poem.

Serendipitous tourist
Jealous Optimist...

Could be a fun new thread, making poetry out of profile tags. LOL

Thanks for reading and commenting! It sure does add a little sumpthin sumpthin to the day!