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easyeverett
02-18-2009, 09:25 PM
Our daily inclinations thrive
In syncopated majesty.
Exquisite notes that soon arrive
Chauffeured by complexity.

Downbeats in-between each bridge
Concussive absolution made.
Relinquish riffs that ride the ridge
Like jazz within my soul inlaid.

Repetition reconstruction,
Constant periodicity.
Represent a new instruction,
Calmed with heated harmony.

Create inventive brilliance please
And put it on the page with jazz.
Progressive interdictions squeeze
The pounding beats the drummer has.

Oh please now play your saxophone,
Melodious the notes abound.
And listen to love's tempered tone,
That stimulates the secrets found.

I think of Coltrane's Karma now,
His genius does prevail in dreams.
When Krupa's on the skins I bow,
It makes appreciation scream.

Jazz music is the magic craved,
Improvisation takes the lead.
I honor Billy, in her grave;
She had a soul that made you bleed.

So stand and then salulte the greats
Who left their mark on life contrived.
Through jazz you interrupt the fates,
Profound the pleasure that's arrived.

Oh mighty golden symbol be,
A scintillating rhythm found.
The glory of jazz history,
When sacrificial brass is crowned!

Silas Thorne
02-18-2009, 10:00 PM
:) I feel your sense of verse and the word weights, easy , but pleasey-yo don't kill the jazz with your posey. Don't ruin scat by scattering back the way, maestro. Don't kill Stan with a plan to make boxes from rough circles drawn by hand in the sand.

easyeverett
02-18-2009, 10:26 PM
Want me to just dump it Silas or just part of it? My drummer actully likes it but I am always open to other opinions. easy

Silas Thorne
02-19-2009, 01:31 AM
No way. Don't listen to me. Who am I, anyway, to give you advice? I can't do the things you do with verse. I just mean when you write about improvisation with jazz I feel it would have been better to break the verse up a little, make the form match the subject. Every poem is good for its own time though, never dump things, just keep moving. Just my opinion, other people probably have completely different ideas on it.

easyeverett
02-19-2009, 01:52 AM
Well, Silas, you are correct and this is the only structured poem I have ever written on jazz and I have written a lot of them. The rest are, as you so astutely point out, in the for of improvised free/verse with poetics imbued. I just did this one to see if I could write it like a musical score with rules of composition applied. I thank you for noticing Silas. To me all opinions are important to broaden our understanding of the mystical nature of verse. Thanks again. easy