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~Sophia~
02-18-2009, 08:39 PM
Just a bit of fun. :lol:
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Life On A String




Marionette jiggling 

from nose to toes 

Pinocchio, Pinocchia, 

the Gepetto God reeled 

when I pleased him but 

just one kink and
it was off with my
Chakra which never
was the la dolce vida 

Chocolate promised so 

I moved to Phoenix 

with a stage hand to live 

in a third floor walk-up 

but my ribbons 

only dangled to 

the second string 

fiddle I never 

learned to play 

crazy 

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a_little_wisp
02-19-2009, 02:32 AM
This felt, to me, like it was teetering on fun and the dark reality of ... well, life, and the betrayals and disappointments we sometimes face within it. Even at the beginning of the poem, however, there's not much lightness - puppets as a subject, unless they're muppets, always unnerve me, being hollow, empty, allowing themselves to be controlled. The stark, familiar reality of the Pheonix bit brought out that eerie, helpless detachment I feel more, too. Poor lady, rough life. :cry:
Solid poem, very cool. Eee.

~Sophia~
02-19-2009, 02:25 PM
Hi Wisp! Sorry this poem didn't tickle you. It really was intended as a bit of fun. Guess my sense of humour runs to the darker side?

PrinceMyshkin
02-19-2009, 04:43 PM
Hi Wisp! Sorry this poem didn't tickle you. It really was intended as a bit of fun. Guess my sense of humour runs to the darker side?

Somehow I overlooked this earlier but yes, even gallows humour can be fun or funny and this is.

Did you know that they're working on Chakra replacement surgery?

~Sophia~
02-19-2009, 10:26 PM
That's very funny P http://www.websmileys.com/sm/aliens/bigcheek.gif

Where can I sign up? (not for the gallows, for the Chakra replacement)