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formality hater
02-14-2009, 03:52 PM
Breaking down

And those smokey eyes,
Deadened by grief,
Have burnt and flared,
To turn into coal,
And that iris has lost,
Its once-loved colour,
Has given way to,
Dead and blackened soot,
And those tear glands,
Are now truly parched,
Which once remained,
Laden with tears,
So her eyes have changed,
They have lost their feeling,
Now her soul too, mutates,
With anguish...it wears!
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Comments are awaited!:)

Dark Muse
02-14-2009, 10:09 PM
Very interesting, I really like how it ended.

formality hater
02-17-2009, 02:07 PM
I am glad that you liked it, Dark Muse!
Thanks.

PrinceMyshkin
02-17-2009, 02:47 PM
Marvellous flow to it and images that seem to be born on the screen!

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