An Innocent Life

[fenderman]

I’m an innocent life, my eyes yet to be opened,
I am so small, yet to breathe in the air.
You may think I’m precious, very beautiful,
But I am inside one who doesn’t care.

Even though I am a blessing from God,
I am thought of as the opposite by my mother.
She’s in an office, signing many forms,
Not thought twice by any other.

Now all the papers have been signed,
The doctor and my mother have met.
They talked for a while about all the precautions,
Then the surgery date was set.

It is now the time, the dreaded moment,
My mother acts like it’s all okay.
I don’t understand, its like nothing’s wrong,
Doesn’t she care that I’m going to die today?

Why doesn’t she love me? What did I do?
These thoughts keep raging through my mind.
She seems like she hates me, I’m just a mistake,
The answers I can’t seem to find.

After driving a while, now arriving at the hospital,
Mother changes into her gown.
She is guided by the nurse into the surgery room,
And she is now lying down.

What happens now I can’t even describe,
I am in excruciating pain.
The doctor is hurting me, he is killing me,
Doing things I won’t explain.

I wish I could scream so he would hear me,
Doing it isn’t even worth a try.
I am too small to stop what they are doing,
I’ll just have to slowly die.

There isn’t much left of me, its all been removed,
I cannot hold on for very long.
He takes the rest of me out of the womb,
My innocent life is now gone.

Tell me what you think!

[Dark Muse]

Right To Choose

I never asked for this
now must I be the one to suffer
perhaps it was a mistake
but can you claim perfection?
We are all but human after all

It was not my choice
not part of my plan,
my life still ahead of me
filled with ambitions,
aspirations, hopes or dreams
should this life be thrown
to the wayside, does my own life
hold no value, because of a human
error made.

You are so easy to pass judgements
but open your eyes, take a look around
at those who were the unwanted
being thrown into an imperfect system
a system that works against them

Left everyday to feel they are unwanted
unloved, passing through the hands
of abusive foster homes, is their life
so charmed? Ask them are they happy
with their lot?

Is that so much a better option
to be forced to bear this burden
that I never wished to have
that I never asked for.

Is a child molested,
beaten, slaved
tormented, born with shattered
dreams before it ever had a
chance of life, faced with only
a bleak future ahead
so much better off
then one which was spared
before it even knew it existed?

I will not ware shackles of shame
it is my life and my choice to make
you do not know my pain you have no
right, to condemn me from where you stand
spouting hellfire, I wonder, have never wanted
a second chance? Are you so free of making
mistakes, that you can lecture me
on what is best to do with my own life?

You do not even know me
while I stare into your hateful eyes
I defy you, no I will not sacrifice myself
call me all the names you want.

[fenderman]

wow! that is amazing. very inspiring words

[Dark Muse]

Thank you!

[Silas Thorne]

Fenderman, this isn't poetry, but rhyming rhetoric.

[fenderman]

but, to dark muse, you have the completely wrong mindset.
well written, but wrong

[fenderman]

and to silas thorne, you can think what you want, but i believe it is poetry

[Silas Thorne]

:) you see, it's not poetry but rhetoric.

[fenderman]

what do you mean? please explain

[Dark Muse]

Well fenderman I can say the same to you. I think your mindset is completely wrong

[Silas Thorne]

Fenderman, your main aim is not to create an artwork or a word sculpture, but to create something intended to persuade others to the 'truth', as you see it. It does rhyme, but that doesn't necessarily make it poetry. Poems are necessarily capable of multiple interpretations since people come to them with their own memories of the past. In your verse there is only one interpretation. In that case, it would probably be more effective to write it as a speech intending to persuade, or even a story, though you would probably have to be clear about your perspective (I mean whether you are writing from the baby's perspective or the mother's) if you did the latter. That is my opinion anyway. Rhetoric's basic purpose is to persuade.

[Dark Muse]

I have to somewhat disagree with you on this one. I think that sometimes a person just wishes to express themselves in poetic verse, even if they are sending a particular message. I do not think one has to write something in essay form just becasue what they are writing is not clearly open to interpitation. In fact writing as poetry can in some cases be more effective then writing an eassay. Even a good essay does not often emotionaly move people in the same way a lyrical verse can.

As well if this were written as an essay I never would have read it myself, granted it did not change my particular opinion but it still got me to read it and inspired me, and so though I do not agree with him, he had served the purpose of making me think about the issue in a way an eassay would not have caused me to do so.

Though I do not do it often, I have been known to write political/social poems that have a clear message of thier own but they still serve as a form of expression.

[fenderman]

I completely agree with dark muse, most poems do express an opinion.
I have won a contest with this poem, it was published in a magazine and a newsletter, and also i have read it in front of 360 people, all being moved by it.
silas thorne, i call that poetry. youve got it all wrong

[Silas Thorne]

:) Good for you then!
I told you that was my opinion. I personally do not like your poem, but others do. That is great. We'll just say everyone has a different opinion then on what poetry is, and leave it at that. :)
You did ask people to tell you what they thought, not necessarily to agree with you. I was just being honest with you from my own perspective.

Follow your own voice. We all have different perspectives. Keep up the writing! :)