AnaKiss
01-31-2009, 03:14 PM
Hey, I know it's a bit much for one post but these are some short poems i've written that i would really love feedback on.
My favorite is FairyTale Dreams!
Far Away
I saw a man, as I walked in the sand, last night on the beach down the way.
I asked his name; he smiled in vain, as it was too dark to see anyway.
Then as he spoke I heard a sweet, strong sound, a voice as rough as the sea
I heard the rush, and the swash, of a wave and I felt that cold sea breeze.
Then I saw that man, who sat in the sand, stand up as if raised by a wave.
He winked and smiled as he moved away, that man who is always so brave.
How I wish one day I may see him again, to him how I wish I may say…
“Who are you, man who sits on the sand, but who lives in a world far away?”
Finally
With quivering lips he leaned in, his smile growing all the more warm.
His hand on her chin, he lifted her head, she blushed and gave in to his charm.
He smiled against her lips; she deepened the kiss, letting out a soft moan.
The love they held hidden for all this time, the love that had had slowly grown,
The love that scared them and drove them insane, had here and now finally shown face.
Now there they were, lying down in the snow, cold but not caring, wrapped in each other’s embrace.
Too Late
He never looked at me the way I wanted,
He never sent his smirk my way.
He’d always put his hand on my shoulder, that touch so desired but yet so haunted,
He never knew it made my day
So every night I lay on my bed, every night I imagined instead
I imagined the passion, the love, the lust,
I imagined the touches, I imagined the thrust.
Now it’s too late, he’ll never know
As he walks down the aisle he puts on quite a show
Heads turn, ladies whisper, they smile, they cry
His friends grin at his cunning and wry
I hear my name I look above, I see the one who I’ve claimed to love
I have “what ifs,” I have regrets
I need that man who makes me sweat
I take one last look, he smirks…I know it’s true
But it’s too late now, I say “I do”
FairyTale Dreams
When I was a child, I would dream about the day,
The day my Prince would come and take me away.
He wouldn’t come on a horse, a carpet or carriage,
He would come on his feet, with a proposal for marriage.
When I was a child I was young and naïve,
But now I know better than to still believe.
Princes don’t exist, fairy tales are lies,
Life’s not always happy, the princess eventually dies.
The Difference between You & I
You’re arrogant, rude, selfish yes proud,
You’re talkative, hurtful, flirty and loud.
You know when I cry, what I want to hear,
You know my breath catches whenever you’re near.
You’re standing, leaning, looking, smirking,
You know your plan is working.
You’re sneaking into my heart, my head, my soul,
Now you’re gone and everything seems so cold.
I’m humble, polite, selfless yes shy,
I’m quiet, helpful, bashful but wry.
I know when you care, I know what you do,
I know you’re not concerned unless it happens to you.
I’m sitting, sighing, thinking, frowning,
I know your plan is crowning.
You’ve snuck into my heart, my head, my soul,
Since you’ve been gone, my life’s been on hold.
Unrequited
I miss your smile, I miss your eyes
I miss the way you know I’ve cried
It’s pathetic I know, to remember so long
I’ve given up everything for a feeling so strong
A feeling like this I know must be real,
An emotion so deep, no time can heal
I wish I could forget this, I wish I could move on
I wish I never met you, I wish this wasn’t wrong
My love is unrequited, my heart is broken without knowledge
My desire will go unfulfilled, my dream will be discouraged
You won’t remember me, you won’t think twice
Your games fooled me, now I’m yours for life.
My favorite is FairyTale Dreams!
Far Away
I saw a man, as I walked in the sand, last night on the beach down the way.
I asked his name; he smiled in vain, as it was too dark to see anyway.
Then as he spoke I heard a sweet, strong sound, a voice as rough as the sea
I heard the rush, and the swash, of a wave and I felt that cold sea breeze.
Then I saw that man, who sat in the sand, stand up as if raised by a wave.
He winked and smiled as he moved away, that man who is always so brave.
How I wish one day I may see him again, to him how I wish I may say…
“Who are you, man who sits on the sand, but who lives in a world far away?”
Finally
With quivering lips he leaned in, his smile growing all the more warm.
His hand on her chin, he lifted her head, she blushed and gave in to his charm.
He smiled against her lips; she deepened the kiss, letting out a soft moan.
The love they held hidden for all this time, the love that had had slowly grown,
The love that scared them and drove them insane, had here and now finally shown face.
Now there they were, lying down in the snow, cold but not caring, wrapped in each other’s embrace.
Too Late
He never looked at me the way I wanted,
He never sent his smirk my way.
He’d always put his hand on my shoulder, that touch so desired but yet so haunted,
He never knew it made my day
So every night I lay on my bed, every night I imagined instead
I imagined the passion, the love, the lust,
I imagined the touches, I imagined the thrust.
Now it’s too late, he’ll never know
As he walks down the aisle he puts on quite a show
Heads turn, ladies whisper, they smile, they cry
His friends grin at his cunning and wry
I hear my name I look above, I see the one who I’ve claimed to love
I have “what ifs,” I have regrets
I need that man who makes me sweat
I take one last look, he smirks…I know it’s true
But it’s too late now, I say “I do”
FairyTale Dreams
When I was a child, I would dream about the day,
The day my Prince would come and take me away.
He wouldn’t come on a horse, a carpet or carriage,
He would come on his feet, with a proposal for marriage.
When I was a child I was young and naïve,
But now I know better than to still believe.
Princes don’t exist, fairy tales are lies,
Life’s not always happy, the princess eventually dies.
The Difference between You & I
You’re arrogant, rude, selfish yes proud,
You’re talkative, hurtful, flirty and loud.
You know when I cry, what I want to hear,
You know my breath catches whenever you’re near.
You’re standing, leaning, looking, smirking,
You know your plan is working.
You’re sneaking into my heart, my head, my soul,
Now you’re gone and everything seems so cold.
I’m humble, polite, selfless yes shy,
I’m quiet, helpful, bashful but wry.
I know when you care, I know what you do,
I know you’re not concerned unless it happens to you.
I’m sitting, sighing, thinking, frowning,
I know your plan is crowning.
You’ve snuck into my heart, my head, my soul,
Since you’ve been gone, my life’s been on hold.
Unrequited
I miss your smile, I miss your eyes
I miss the way you know I’ve cried
It’s pathetic I know, to remember so long
I’ve given up everything for a feeling so strong
A feeling like this I know must be real,
An emotion so deep, no time can heal
I wish I could forget this, I wish I could move on
I wish I never met you, I wish this wasn’t wrong
My love is unrequited, my heart is broken without knowledge
My desire will go unfulfilled, my dream will be discouraged
You won’t remember me, you won’t think twice
Your games fooled me, now I’m yours for life.