My first poem（Please make recommendations，ｔｈａｎｋｓ）

[dai]

My dear child
One day
I made a dream
Back when you dreamed of
Soft pale yellow hair fluttering in the wind
I went in front of you
Closed against me
Pupillary brown in the sun's reflection shone
Your hand
I would like to one after another color balloons
There are red, yellow and green, blue ...
Finally, I want you to
Is a black balloon
It would be the last in my life, I request you to balloon - life
Because I can not give you more of the other
Time my dear child into child
No matter what I want you to
I will not refuse can not refuse
Just
In my days gone
Child is still young
You will remember me?

[PrinceMyshkin]

I feel the great tenderness in this. Here and there, however, the thoughts do not seem complete, as in


Finally, I want you to
Is a black balloon

[dai]

I think i can not really understand you. You mean is it is very bad? If it let you are unhapp.I am very sorry.But i will try to best!

[PrinceMyshkin]

I think i can not really understand you. You mean is it is very bad? If it let you are unhapp.I am very sorry.But i will try to best!

No, it is not very bad. The sentiment is moving, but it appears that English is not your native language and in places your expression is clumsy or unclear. You need to read more things in English and if you know any English-speaking people, practice having conversation with them.

[dai]

Thx u recommendation!!!