Extravagantionism?!?!

[Jocafer]

Enjoy. I would really appreciate constructive criticisms, hehe, though its your call. Its just something I thought of a while back. Please comment on what you think about this :D

EDIT: i managed to title change, but i cant change the very main title. how do you make it more multisyllabic and how do you add more force? help help need to learn

Hope this is good enough :)

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Ostentatious and bombastic
Pompous and grandiloquent
Ostentatiously pompous! *sarcastic*
They only mean one thing

In all its plethoric extravagance
Though euphonious to the ear
Would rather daunt the common eye
Before bidding these 'heiroglyphics' goodbye

Why be supererogatory?
This is but panoply of glamour
Like this, a play with rhymes
With a trip to the dictionary

Its subterfuge referred to as art
A lure to hide only but a small part
And most fish of the sea
Carry on with this dramatic writing

So, in my most demure conjecture
Abrogate this febrile style
Or, in other words,
Make it simple for a while!

[kiz_paws]

Hey, I thought that your poem was creative, playful, and very fun to read.

Cute ending, too. :nod:

By the way, welcome to LitNet, Jocafer! :)

[Jocafer]

Hey, I thought that your poem was creative, playful, and very fun to read.

Cute ending, too. :nod:

By the way, welcome to LitNet, Jocafer! :)

hey, thanks!!!! ahehehehehe :D

im glad you liked it! :)

[Silas Thorne]

I enjoyed reading your poem. It was great fun. Welcome to the madness that is Litnet! :)

It might have been a little better if you had used more multisyllabic words in the last lines of stanzas 1, 3 and 4. If there are more long words in all of the stanzas except the end of the last one, I believe it would add more force to the plain language when you finish off. However, I do like the lines:

...a play with rhymes
With a trip to the dictionary

I'm constantly amazed that some people have rhyming dictionaries.

[Jocafer]

I enjoyed reading your poem. It was great fun. Welcome to the madness that is Litnet! :)

It might have been a little better if you had used more multisyllabic words in the last lines of stanzas 1, 3 and 4. If there are more long words in all of the stanzas except the end of the last one, I believe it would add more force to the plain language when you finish off. However, I do like the lines:

...a play with rhymes
With a trip to the dictionary

I'm constantly amazed that some people have rhyming dictionaries.

hehehehe thank you, thank you dude!!! :D

cool, cool imma take note it, hehe. i guess i need to read alot more poems here to understand how to make 'em good without the traditional rhyme. also, id like to know what stuff and special elements make the other poems here(the non-traditional ryhming ones) so great yet simple. i wanna make some of those too! :D

and thank you again mehn, i really appreciate the comment! :)

[Pendragon]

A trip through the dictionary might make a better title! :)

[Jocafer]

A trip through the dictionary might make a better title! :)

hehehe sure, sure man! :D