As Far As Farting Goes

[jon1jt]

for Virgil

[Virgil]

:lol: Good Lord.

[jon1jt]

:lol: Good Lord.

:lol::lol::lol:I'm laughing at my own poem good lord!

[firefangled]

Shouldn't "ring a lingy" be hyphenated? :lol: :D

[blp]

I dunno. It's a bit Bukowski-ish.




[secretly laughing my, um, head off]

[Delta40]

I don't know what to say. uhm the imagery is good? (lol)

[LostPrincess13]

*incredulous* *mouth agape*

:lol:

[laidbackperson]

Good one! Enjoyed it thoroughly.:lol:

[kandaurov]

Great stuff! Particularly good: the nonchalant, matter-of-fact tone.

[Xillus_Xavier]

Freaking hilarious man!
This almost had me in the floor laughing.

[Silas Thorne]

Great stuff, let it rip! :lol:

...Who has the air freshener?

[Silas Thorne]

I just read my Coke bottle:
Listen closely &
hear the
happiness being
unleased
when you open
this bottle.

It made me think of the first part. :)

[Janine]

Stinky stuff... *Yes, Good Lord!* :lol: I guess you told him!

[Riesa]

I have to echo Virgil's "Good Lord" only mine has an exclamation point or two. !! but it is undeniably funny, imaginative and well-written.

[Il Penseroso]

so you've returned to post fart poems eh!?

it has pretty good sound mechanics, but overall I'm with blp on this one.

[jon1jt]

so you've returned to post fart poems eh!?

it has pretty good sound mechanics, but overall I'm with blp on this one.

Yeah but blp's a minimalist.

I've banned myself from writing on subjects like the moon or stars or dreamy women. I leave the sonorous all up to you now. ;)

I write about Walmart urinals too.

[Pensive]

It's so ****ing funny! :lol:

[jon1jt]

It's so ****ing funny! :lol:


****ing funny...I can live with that! Thanks pensive.


IP: What the heck are sound mechanics anyway? Are they the sounds of farting in the poem? The problem with that is there is no actual farting done in the poem. I dunno.

[Il Penseroso]

Sound mechanics, I suppose, equal good handling of line, breaks, and devices that make the words echo. No, I agree, no sounds of farting.

perhaps the fact that I chose to respond to that in the poem demonstrates my not-too-fond attitude toward the subject matter, beyond initial shock value. I'm not left dreamy-eyed and creation-inspired like many of my favorite poems from you.

[jon1jt]

Sound mechanics, I suppose, equal good handling of line, breaks, and devices that make the words echo. No, I agree, no sounds of farting.

perhaps the fact that I chose to respond to that in the poem demonstrates my not-too-fond attitude toward the subject matter, beyond initial shock value. I'm not left dreamy-eyed and creation-inspired like many of my favorite poems from you.

Woha! Now hold on a sec---initial shock value?? But we all fart among other things. Ahem...natural bodily functions. Expand your poetic horizons. Deny nothing.

Oh, thank you for the compliment. I'm happy, at least you like some of my poems, just not this one, and that other recent one or two. :p

Didn't you get what I was saying about the World Light Generation? Aw man, everyone's hating lately. I expect it from Virgil, but IP, blp? Oh, Riesa too. Sheesher. :p

[eyemaker]

:lol: :lol:

[jon1jt]

:lol: :lol:

You see now, eyemaker enjoyed my poem, he wasn't "shocked" by it now was he? No. And he's not a hater either. :D Thank you dear eyemaker.

[Virgil]

Have you ever heard of Howard Stern Jon? This is the type of thing Howard Stern does. I wouldn't be proud of it. ;)

[Riesa]

I never said I hated it. it's just that with great power comes great responsibility, and see you've made the baby of the forum (sorry Pensive, I'll never accept that you are a young adult, I shall always think of you as the baby genius) swear! for shame. ;-)

[blp]

Yeah but blp's a minimalist.


Who moi?

First I've heard of it. And hating? Where? When? You mean me going 'a bit Bukowski-ish'? Are you kidding? You know what I was (jokingly) referring to don't you? Don't you?

[jon1jt]

Who moi?

First I've heard of it. And hating? Where? When? You mean me going 'a bit Bukowski-ish'? Are you kidding? You know what I was (jokingly) referring to don't you? Don't you?


Oh yeah I know b, I'm just goofing with you guys. I really appreciate the feedback, the good and ugly, forces me to take second and third looks just when I thought I got it all right. Thanks.

[Il Penseroso]

I like the Birds in an Airplane one as well, just haven't gotten to commenting on it yet. I haven't read the Walmart Urinal poem yet.

I'm with you on the World Light Generation; it's just that my methods of enjoying it/dropping my pebble in for the universe mean I want to become a high school English teacher, still.

No hating from me.

[jon1jt]

I like the Birds in an Airplane one as well, just haven't gotten to commenting on it yet.



I haven't read the Walmart Urinal poem yet.


I'm not sure you should read my Walmart Urinal poem anymore. I got a really...well, a PM saying this about it:


"the coversation in your poem is boring, your writing is dull, there is nothing fantastic at all about that stupid urinal poem, it bored the F**k out of me."

You're going to be an English teacher and all, there's children to think about. I dunno.

[Silas Thorne]

Originally Posted by anonymous
"the coversation in your poem is boring, your writing is dull, there is nothing fantastic at all about that stupid urinal poem, it bored the F**k out of me."

:lol:Classic!

It least now this comment is where the person should have put it, instead of hiding behind a PM :)

World Light Generation. What is that? Sounds like something the late and great Dr. Tesla wanted to do.

[Silas Thorne]

very constructive, you could build a bridge on that