Is my first wordpress article good?

[jjosephs]

Hello everyone, I am not new to essay writing but have not written in a long while. I decided to get back into the habit and put myself out there on the Internet.

Here is my first article: Email - The Gift of the Modern World (http://jjwrites.wordpress.com/2009/01/04/e-mail-the-gift-of-the-modern-world/)

Do you think it's good?

What do you like about my work?

What do I need to include or work-on?

General tips, advice, and constructive criticism are welcomed. :)

[jjosephs]

Hello, anyone care to comment?

[JacobF]

I think it's well written, yes.
I like it's succinctness -- I don't care much for huge, rambling blog posts.
I didn't like the subject. It may have been better for when email just came out and people were still asking "what's e-mail?" People nowadays are generally knowledgeable about the tool and pretty much everyone uses it. That's not to say that the topic of e-mail should never be discussed, but you didn't really say anything new about it.

[jjosephs]

Ah, Firstly, I'd like to say thanks for just replying! So many forum views and no responses; it's like a desert in here!

Your feedback is much appreciated. I'll improve on my subject matter as I go along but this is just a first post to "break my blog's virginity" so to speak.

[Delta40]

I would be much more interested in an article which explores how this communication tool has transformed our society and what its implications are. How for example it impacts on our identity, our ability to develop relationships on a whole new level. Take Secondlife.com for example and then consider the rising numbers of children in the 21st century who are illiterate and have never so much as had the simple experience of writing a letter and posting it, nor understanding basic processes as a result, yet developing technological information at a fast rate.

Your article is the tip of an iceberg. As you say this is your first post so to encourage you I would recommend you delve deeper because the social implications of the world wide web are very broad indeed

Good Luck

[Emil Miller]

I would be much more interested in an article which explores how this communication tool has transformed our society and what its implications are. How for example it impacts on our identity, our ability to develop relationships on a whole new level. Take Secondlife.com for example and then consider the rising numbers of children in the 21st century who are illiterate and have never so much as had the simple experience of writing a letter and posting it, nor understanding basic processes as a result, yet developing technological information at a fast rate.

Your article is the tip of an iceberg. As you say this is your first post so to encourage you I would recommend you delve deeper because the social implications of the world wide web are very broad indeed

Good Luck

You have made some very pertinent comments there. The whole technological revolution we are going through now is moving apace but who knows where it is taking us? Take as an example the use of texting where we are witnessing the erosion of language itself via the use of numbers and vowels instead of words e.g. 4 instead of for and U instead of you and the many other examples in current usage.
Two writers, with whom I would normally take issue for their views on society in general, were very concerned with the direction that language and society was heading.
The first was George Orwell who saw the increasing use use of abbreviations as an attack on language. Heaven knows what he would have thought of the examples given above.
The second was E.M.Forster whose short story The Machine Stops is a frightening tale of what happens to a world totally reliant on technology where human will has been weakened to the point that humans can no longer do anything for themselves.