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Jim1218
12-14-2008, 03:57 AM
Ok guys, so I wrote this story during the weekends, let me know what you think:


There once was a lonely traveller.

One night, he stayed at an old hotel and booked a room on the second floor.

The traveller walked to his room, but noticed a strange old door at the end of the hallway. That night, he heard strange moaning noises coming from the mysterious room, so he walks up to the door and knocks. No answer.

He peeked through the keyhole, and saw a pale white woman standing in the middle of a bare room. Her back was facing him, but he could see clearly her old white skin under the moonlight. The traveller retreated to back to his hotel room.

The next morning, the traveller decided to peek through the keyhole again out of curiosity. So he did, but this time, all he saw was a blood-red color. Hmmph, he thought, the resident must have found he was peeking last night and blocked the keyhole.

So he asked the manager about the person who lived in that mysterious room, and complained about the bone chilling noises at night. The manager explained that a few decades ago, a whole family was murdered in that room, and he never rented it out as he thought it was cursed.

He added that the family was an odd one, for everyone had extremely pale skin and their eyes were red. Red as blood.



Creepy huh?

Furbla
12-17-2008, 04:22 AM
Wow, this is hastily written but it is kind of creepy the way you write it.
The way I took it was that the blood red colour in the keyhole was the womans eye?

Joreads
12-17-2008, 09:18 PM
Yeah it is creepy in a weird way. Maybe you could expland on it a little for us?

shortstoryfan
12-17-2008, 11:15 PM
Umm, I had this dream a couple months ago...seriously. Except I got caught by the vampire, and then I had to run through the ghetto to get away, but when I got to the place I thought would be safe, there were vampires there too, and they had caught the building on fire.

Somehow, though, you have written down my dream.