My Haiku/Senryu

[Dark Muse]

Since they are short, I thought I would keep them all collected in one place, instead of posting them individually. As often I will write one, but not really know where to post it, not wanting to create a whole thread just for it.

Blank Page

Only the silence
grasping into the darkness
coming up empty

[Dark Muse]

Castaway

Lost on distant shores
feel myself floating adrift
upon the sea within

[Shadow Poet]

Two excellent pieces. I can't say I didn't like either. Great work.

[cogs]

these say alot with a little. both seem unfulfilling. why is emptiness so verbose?

[Dark Muse]

Thank you. Haha, that is a good question Cogs.

[Dark Muse]

Embrace

All I can think of
is you being here with me
locked in an embrace

[TheFifthElement]

These are really good DM. You make it look easy (but I know it's not!).

[Dark Muse]

Hehe thank you

[Dark Muse]

Sun God

Mithra the shining God
we shall celebrate your light
for your birthday comes

[Dark Muse]

Old Woman Winter

Winter wind blowing
Hush! comes the new fallen snow
under the Crone moon

[Dark Muse]

On another forum I belong to, someone started up a thread like the shared Haiku game here, and so this is the result of that.

I'm an old man
yet I am without wisdom
we are all just fools

[Makai]

Old Woman Winter

Winter wind blowing
Hush! comes the new fallen snow
under the Crone moon

I loved this Haiku, it fit so well the traditional writing the theme of the poem as an observer of nature, "under the crone moon" was a beautiful enigmatic way to end the poem.


On another forum I belong to, someone started up a thread like the shared Haiku game here, and so this is the result of that.

I'm an old man
yet I am without wisdom
we are all just fools

This too struck a chord in me. It had a message that as we age we can see our own foolishness more honesty and maybe even with a small smile.

Very good!

[Dark Muse]

Thank you

[Dark Muse]

My lips aquiver
for the taste of you alone
my thoughts all for you

[Dark Muse]

Cascading the blue
Mediterranean seas
neath the setting sun

[Dark Muse]

So vast expanded
lost, confusion, wandering
awed infinity

[Dark Muse]

We have but one breath
with two hearts joined together
while our souls collide

[Dark Muse]

Yours wise eyes watching
sing mournful to winter moon
silent on the snow

[Dark Muse]

Following a sea
sweet serenity take me
through your winding paths

[Dark Muse]

Whisper in the trees
hush speaks the new born river
awaken in the shade

[Dark Muse]

She sings as a lark
painted in cherry blossoms
sweet as a river

[Dark Muse]

Inside glass houses
surrounded by watching eyes
we all fall apart

[Dark Muse]

Moth Dreams

Eyes as moth wings close
dreaming of far away snow
escape from sunlight

[Dark Muse]

Silence speaks the word
only in death is comfort
fear not the darkness

[firefangled]

Inside glass houses
surrounded by watching eyes
we all fall apart

I liked many of them. This is my favorite.

[Dark Muse]

Thank you

[Paulclem]

Old Woman Winter

Winter wind blowing
Hush! comes the new fallen snow
under the Crone moon

Hi Dark Muse. This one is my favourite out of your collection. I do like Haiku.

I was just wondering out of interest - not as a criticism I hasten to add -about the traditions of Haiku. A lot are written by the international community who insist on stringent rules for the submission to their competitions. They have the 5 7 5 rules, but the content must have a natural subject and some indication of the season. It comes from the tradition of Basho etc - as I'm sure you know - whose poems were a brilliant expression of this with a spiritual aspect. The above poem fulfils this criteria, but your other ones sometimes don't.

I appreciate the tradition, but I also think that to stick to such rules is inhibiting. It's not a if you can't get spiritual insight in a city. As such I think "urban Haiku" is fine. I'd be interested in what you think?

[Dark Muse]

Interesting question, I am a person that does sometimes use a certain amount of poetic licence with different poetry styles. While I also respect the tradition and often try within my works to follow the tradition, I do not wish to let the tradition stifle my voice, or get in the way of what I truly wish to express.

As well some of my poems which seem to verge away from the traditional expectations of Haiku are intended as a senryu, which are structured just like a Haiku, but traditionally are focused around some element of human nature or emotion.

And it is also true, that I do often use the Haiku as a form in which to speak of nature without always adhereing to having to include something seasonal as well.

[Paulclem]

I've written a bit of free verse, ad experimented with more formal styles as I became more familiar with them. Quite challenging, but I think the form has to fit the subject, and free verse is just as good as more formal styles dpending on the subject.

I lke the option of being able to use free verse and it be a recognisable form of itself - it seems more democratic. The rules are, after all, just an artificial construction.

One thing I do like about formal styles like Haiku is the discipline it instils. With a bit of practice you can get to the stage of instinctively having the right syllable count.

[Dark Muse]

Eye of the world
hang heavy in twilight skies
adorned in pearl

[firefangled]

Beautiful image Dark Muse. You make excellent Haikus

[Dark Muse]

Thank you!

[Dark Muse]

Winter Eyes

Touched by winter eyes
I become frozen inside
your private tundra.

[Dark Muse]

Loose me in your eyes
to drown within your blood stream
and forget myself

[OctopusGarden]

"Castaway" gave me shivers as I read it. I relate to the feelings deeply. Excellent.

[Dark Muse]

Bloom of Love

My love burns for you
like a flower in spring bloom
but never fading.

[Dark Muse]

Morning Tears

Sunlit dream catchers
tangled among spider webs
catching morning tears

[Dark Muse]

The Tear Eaters

Harvester of tears
moth wings carry pain away
a whisper like a dream

[Dark Muse]

Poet

A quivering soul
like fingers of dancing grass
vibrantly alive.

Faith

A weightless body
lost within the cosmic sphere
seeking Nirvana.

Love

You unfurl me
a stroking ray of sunlight
the warmth of my soul

[Dark Muse]

Sunrise

Fire blooms the sky
blazing through the horizon
in morning glory.

Sunset

Violet colored skies
in subtle muted beauty
with no less splendor.

[Dark Muse]

Owl

Mystic of the night
with your nocturnal secrets
see into my soul.

[Dark Muse]

Be still winter night
hush upon your virgin snow
let silent wings fly

[jajdude]

On another forum I belong to,

Curious, what is the other forum? I like your work.

[Dark Muse]

The Poetry Forum

http://www.thepoetryforum.co.uk/

(I go by the name Silver Wind over there)

and I also post a lot of my written works on DA

http://silverwynd.deviantart.com/

[jajdude]

OK, will check that site later, thanks.

[Dark Muse]

Darklight moon baby
lost in your jelly allure
floating through the sea

[Dark Muse]

Your lost winter eyes
penetrate into my soul
give me frozen death.

[kevinthediltz]

You write as beautifully and dark as I remember, muse.

[Dark Muse]

Thank you very much

[kevinthediltz]

I didn't mean to steal your thunder there. I must have misread and thought it was the "write a haiku thread." My apologies.

[Dark Muse]

I didn't mean to steal your thunder there. I must have misread and thought it was the "write a haiku thread." My apologies.

It is quite alright.

[Dark Muse]

Mother of harvest
bless this bounty which she gives
with her bitter tears.

[cacian]

Dark Muse
about the Harvest Haiku
May I ask why ''bitter''?

[Dark Muse]

Dark Muse
about the Harvest Haiku
May I ask why ''bitter''?

It was inspired by the myth of Demeter. So the bitter tears is a reference to her grief because the coming winter is her lamenting over loosing her daughter Persephone to the underworld.

[cacian]

It was inspired by the myth of Demeter. So the bitter tears is a reference to her grief because the coming winter is her lamenting over loosing her daughter Persephone to the underworld.

Ah I see. Thanks Dark Muse I was not aware of the reference of the Demeter myth.
It is a beautiful Senryu.
Dark Muse sorry to ask one more thing:
Is the picture on top of signature your artwork?

[Dark Muse]

Ah I see. Thanks Dark Muse I was not aware of the reference of the Demeter myth.
It is a beautiful Senryu.
Dark Muse sorry to ask one more thing:
Is the picture on top of signature your artwork?

Thank you, and no I cannot take credit for that. It is by Munch

[Dark Muse]

Fire in the sky
her ethereal beauty blinds
day aligns with night

[Dark Muse]

Moth dreams visit me
stir the embers of my soul
bleeding passion through my ink

[Dark Muse]

Summer Storms

Sultry summer winds
evening skies burst with thunder
air becomes electric.

Nature's Breath

Whispers in my soul
lost amid eternal night
Nature's breath rejuvenates.

[Dark Muse]

Aspen leaves quiver
by a stroke of winds fingertips
in pleasure they sing.

[Dark Muse]

Egret

He walks in the reeds
on delicate spindle legs
with nervous stoicism

[Dark Muse]

My heart beats for you
My breath stolen on your lips
Your touch revives me