Ahoy!

[mazHur]

AHOY!
by mazHur

I am in a whirl pool
struggling with the strong gust
of wind and waves;
You standing at the shore
know not what passes on me;
Keep smiling,my dear,
and enjoy the scene
until I tire out
and go down the deep blue sea
with the ship of my life,
~
the sharks gulping up my flesh,
my hair and bones rolled over
to clam and oyster beds
heading for reincarnation
into a bigger and safer ship than Titanic,
the luxuries of which are the apple of eye
of sweet smiling uncaring faces like you;
Then wait, if you can ,my dear,
for my rebirth over time and when
and if we meet I wish
you have the same smile
that glows on your face now
to welcome my old love back!
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~





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[Kawthar K.]

Incomplete poem?
Do you mind analyzing it, Maz?

[mazHur]

perhaps?
just a momentary thought, I think.

How would you like me to 'close' it for the sake of 'completion'??

[Kawthar K.]

I don't know, you must use your imagination.
You've used the ship word. Try sailing, maybe?

I like what you've written so far, though