one frosty morning in february

[amuse]

she checks the calendar
is sure her eyes can rearrange time
monday must come before saturday
it's happened before hasn't it
at least once this millenium
or no? can she
be lying to herself
will she have to, she wonders,
fill a third goldfish
bowl with yet another funeral
or should she
does she
she wishes
she had time to name a fantasy.

[Sitaram]

is sure her eyes can rearrange time


Fabulous line!

[subterranean]

Ash, I've been asking the same question. My second fish died 2 weeks ago (lasted for about 3 weeks, the one before died about a week after I bought it from the pet store). So I've been wondering whether I should fill my bowl for the 3rd time with a new fish, since I'm afraid that I'd end up with another death.

Oh enuf babling.

Good one Ash :thumbs_up


will she have to, she wonders,
fill a third goldfish
bowl with yet another funeral
.

[Jay]

lol, feels a bit... in a rush, made me think of today's morning when I slept through the alarm clock.

I love the last two lines

she wishes
she had time to name a fantasy.

[amuse]

i'm glad you all like it
but
i was too obscure.
(and didn't want to be gross.)
basically, the goldfish funeral down a toilet bowl was analagous with a miscarriage. but you all like it as is! so: i am just going to cut and paste a more clear but hopefully still obscure version in this post, while trying not to spell out this girl's fear that she's late again.

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she checks the calendar
is sure her eyes can rearrange time
monday must come before saturday
it's happened before hasn't it
at least once this millenium
or no? can she
be lying to herself
will she have to, she wonders,
fill yet another bidet
with yet another funeral
or should she,
does she-
she wishes
she had time to name a fantasy.

[subterranean]

OMG, that's about loosing a baby?

Oh I'm so shallow :(

[amuse]

it wasn't well written, B. ;) so it's all on me.
none of that :( or calling yourself shallow. tsk!

[baddad]

Wow........life............death.................. ..both with their just quota of fear and pain.....too real.....

[mono]

I love how so much of your poetry, amuse, contains metaphors, especially without the language forms of symbolism, such as simile and onomanopoeia. This poem proves especially deep into a sensitive topic, diving far down a poet's raw feelings, which makes it all the more beautiful.

[amuse]

thank you, mono, i'm glad you like it. this is the first time i ever wrote about this particular topic.

and baddad, it was a little hard to do this one...but hard too to go to sleep without writing. i'm not really into sleep deprivation.

btw, mono, i'm going to reply. please(!) don't think i've forgotten.