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wagravity
11-09-2008, 11:08 PM
Severed ties
Despicable lies
All believed from angel eyes

Truths mistaken
Heart misplacement
Hear the world's worst understatement

Sheltered feelings
Quite appealing
Out of mind to start the healing

Endless cries
From blatant lies
For all of this, I apologize

Domer121
11-10-2008, 10:36 AM
I really like this poem.. If you are unsure of the title, you should change it until you are sure.
:)

librarius_qui
11-10-2008, 01:24 PM
I find it very interesting too.

I think the uncertainty makes part of the title in a clever way ... :D

Difficult to comment a poem on feelings, because it says all it's to be said, and I like to talk about contents rather than about forms.

The forms, however, are what makes your poem an interesting piece of literature, in itself, at least.

Thoughts.


:crash:

sundays50
11-10-2008, 07:09 PM
dig the rhythm

manny2
11-12-2008, 08:17 AM
very nice, i liked the flow of this