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READER34
11-08-2008, 12:45 PM
I was a labourer on this pleasant land

A generation sowing seeds on this sphere

Without ambition the plough was my steer

A course furrowed by each and very hand.





Life was simple each and every day

We toiled hard in the searing midday sun

Long until the plough had finally done

The arduous work to earn our pitiful pay



As times rolled by work became scarce

The land shrouded by a different sound

Mechanisation began to turn the ground

Stripping the village and local people bare

READER34
11-08-2008, 02:30 PM
I looked in the mirror
The mirror looked at me
A thousand lines crossing a troubled sea
Years of sorrow etched deeply, sadly.

I watched as the tears welled
A million regrets, a life of remorse
A journey that has lost its course
Smiles extinguished, happiness expelled.

My childhood memories in the glass
I reach out, but long since diminished
Thoughts of yesteryear failing, admonished
Reminiscences are clouded, life still troubled.