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BloodFlame
10-28-2008, 07:46 PM
THE START OF A NEW LIFE
There is no way I would go to school today. I had a science test, that I did'nt study for, an andavanced math test,and I might be a vampire! I woke up thinking about the stressful things going on at school. Little did I know that the most stressful thing was about to go down right now.
"Ugh. My mouth tastes funny," I noticed as I walked pathetically to the bathroom. I closed my eyes apon entry to the sink. As my eyes were clossed, I began to move the small tooth brush that I had'nt been able to replace in monthes in my teeth. I spat out white and red. As the water running, I dicovered something horrible that could prove my vampire theory.

Right upon dicovery, I steeped back and double took the mirror in front of me. My shirt had been stained in blood. "This really could'nt prove anything," I said to reasure myself. But there was no doubt there was blood. It stretched from my chest, all the way down to my pants. It smelled so good...

Suddenly, my eyes flashed to a memory of a waneing moon. Street lamps were going down the street. I was on top of one. I was searching for something. But for what? I saw another lady about my age walking. She then cut into an ally way. I jumped down from the lamp post. I did'nt even wince at the hight of the fall. Then, I went into a persuit mode. I leaned forward, my hands behind my back as I started to run after the woman. I was silent. I ran and with each step I took, I got closer and quieter. I was about 10 feet away when I jumped at her. Then I saw myself hover over her neck before she could even scream...


I re-awoke from my vision. It scared me. I looked back in the mirror. The blood was gone. I was shocked by the sudden disapperence of it. But, this made me sad. I wanted more. I wanted more blood to come like a bad addiction...

mmaria
11-12-2008, 05:58 PM
Huh! I am too scared to read this one, sorry!

Englishrose
11-24-2008, 06:20 PM
WOW
This is a good opening :)
you should carry it on!

SpurYourImagina
11-26-2008, 03:23 PM
I like this very short and original story. I think this is a great beginning or ending to a more lengthy story. You have a few grammatical and spelling errors you should fix. If you eventually decide to lengthen it then watch the "I this... and I that..." as it becomes redundant while reading the same piece over a longer period of time.

Sonofjohn
11-30-2008, 01:45 AM
Sigh*

cundiff11
12-15-2008, 02:50 PM
good story please continue

1n50mn14
12-15-2008, 03:05 PM
Fix spelling and grammatical errors, and I'll read it.